Early morning -- time to write --

b"h

22 Aug 2013

Early morning -- time to write --

To leave the canyons of the night

Unto the monsters met in dream --

That they might settle into sleep

And keep to themselves as you mind

The dawning day -- now yours -- behold!

What chance await?  What thing to find?

What tales to tell -- and to be told

To you -- that you might write them down

Upon a leaf of paper new --

That all your words be right and true

Before the night again come round.

Reviews

[lee von cleef]

"Upon a leaf of paper new --" yes I like the way one line can hold all the thought to your page.

[Firestone Feinberg]

Thanks again for this comment and all the others. I am honored that you read so much of my poetry -- it's more of it than I ever read. --David

[Relic]

Excellent writing David. I like it.

[Firestone Feinberg]

Thank you so much! You make me smile. So glad you enjoyed it. David

[John]

The poem is like a warning from a nursery rhyme, 'Now listen children, use your day time to record the tales that have been told to you at night. And hurry up, before it gets dark!' It is darker than the Vincent Price narrative which introduces Michael Jackson's Thriller, lighter than the William Blake of Tyger Tyger. There are lots of interesting deviations from the standard nursery rhyme. The 'To you' at the beginning of the third stanza almost jumps out at the reader. We would have expected the sentence to finish on the previous line. Effects such as this combined with the self mocking Grand Guignol tone set by a phrase like 'the dawning day' and the irregular rhyming pattern are enough to unsettle both children and sensitive adults.

[Firestone Feinberg]

Thanks, John, for taking so much time and care in reviewing this poem. Although I didn't intend to give it a nursery rhyme flavor, now -- whenever I read the poem I find that your keen observation is in my mind as I read; your impression has become mine. That has never happened to me before. It makes me appreciate the strong power a review can have even on the poet'S own interpretation of his poem. Interesting, what?

[Ed Hart]

a classic, for sure......

[Firestone Feinberg]

Thank you so much -- made my day! --D

[bobc]

D...a good one this. Liked it...bobc

[Firestone Feinberg]

Thanks Bob!