Welcome to My Nightmare

I lay down my head

fade out into sleep.

Walk into the land of the dreamers.

Turn and see that beautiful  girl, strung up in a tree.

The forest filled with cries of the broken boy.

Run away from those torments 

right into my father.

Sigh of relief, a turn for the better.

I see it happen, shot to the head 

fallen in front of me.

Where to go?

sobbing now, wanting out.

pushing forward, night's not over.

followed now, dodging the shadow 

caught by the stalker.

angry I ran

knife to throat.

Can't break free.

Scream for help.

Never heard. 

Death grows nearer, why can't I wake from these fears?

Close my eyes, prepare for the end.

Feel cold blade and warm blood.

Let me go, small cut.

Left on my knees

crawl on to dawn.

Kasey Miriam 2015

Author's Note

I am not very great at poems that aren't three lines. here's a shot.

Reviews

[FJ]

I enjoyed this very much - I was pulled right into the forest and images of each step were vivid because of your words. Three lines can be doubled easily, then six gets easier. You're an excellent writer and I believe you have over come the three line poem. But don't abandon that form because it is more difficult to get your point across in only three lines.
Please keep writing

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you so much for your kindness

[Dark Heart of Winter]

Very descriptive of the terrifying, rapid-changing experience of a nightmare. I like it :)

Would love to see more longer poems like this :)

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you. I will continue to try longer poems!

[Jack Kennedy]

This actually pretty good, deep and thought out well enough to construct...

[Kasey Miriam]

thank you. for the review. My demons of the year past have been itching to become part of my work.

[Kasey Miriam]

Behind the mask goes into detail of this.

[Jack Kennedy]

I'll check that out right now and I would appreciate a look at my recent works (only 2)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The title caught my eye, of coarse firs thing that came to mind was the Alice Cooper song of the same name…. anyways if this is a dream of yours I would say it represents a fear of being helpless when things get tough for yourself or a loved one. But then again I am no psychologist.

[Kasey Miriam]

its a few nightmares. A friend's suicide, My best friend in a broken state that was close to commiting suicide, and a guy that i was "friends" with that ended up being a total creep. All of which left me helples. Thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome… dreams are about working out your feelings.

[icelandicblue]

Very disturbing and graphic. You did a great job pulling your reader in and allowing no exit until the final line.

[Kasey Miriam]

thank you very much. I try my best

[Sami Khalil]

"angry I ran

knife to throat.

Can't break free.

Scream for help.

Never heard.

Close my eyes, prepare for the end."

A nightmare indeed. I like this write...:)................

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:).............

[Nusquam Esse]

I really like surreal work, so despite this not being your forte, I still enjoyed it simply because I love 'contorted dreams'. Now, as you said, this is not something you are experienced with; and bluntly put, it shows. There are a few typos which I will mention, but the main issue here is probably word choice more than anything. I would go through each line and ponder what different words you could use. With some additional work this can go from an entertaining good pieces of prose, to something which is great. I would do suggestions, but for something like word choice, it should be the choice of the writer. Good Luck! Here are the errors I noticed,
Alright, the usage of lay vs. lie is a bit tricky; but people usually lie down, and they lay down objects. In this case, since you describe your head, you would use lay, "I lay down my head".
You should also have a comma after "I see it happen"
You mispelled front as fornt
You also need an apostrophe in Cant and Lets

Good Job on leaving your comfort zone, it helps us grow as writers.

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you again. I will edit soon.

[Pax]

Dreams is a perfect escape, a perfect resting place to be. BUt sometime nightmares comes, as sudden as the golden dream. I do think you have poetically describe how nightmares begun... very nice piece my friend.

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you for reading

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

I must say Kasey I think you did splendidly. A very emotional write

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you. I surprised myself this time

[A. Amos]

Mom Kasey is going to be a star writer, I have strong believe in her work and she is very hard working...thank you for supporting her.

[anne p. murray- LadeeAnne]

It is always a pleasure to meet your friends my dear son and to have the privilege of reading their writings

[A. Amos]

Another epic and true magnum-opus, you my friend are extrmely good and what I enjoy the most about your read is...you surprise your readers with always something new. Keep it up my friend ypu will go long way:)

[Kasey Miriam]

went out on a limb and tried something new. thank you

[A. Amos]

This shows your devotion, passion and dedication for writing. I love those people who know what they want in life and for that i respect you my dear. Proud to be your friend and you're always welcome