Chapter Two: The Beggar at the Door

“Three years left to prepare my children. It’s not enough time.” The queen told herself. Her triplets Zahra, Ptolemy, and Aahmes, entered the castle soaking wet. As they passed the throne room their mother called them into the room. Still dripping from the rain the three of them walked toward the queen. 

“Why were you three out in that storm?” Orithyia asked angrily.

“We were training as we do every day.” Ptolemy stated brashly. 

“We have to be able to fight and fly in all conditions” Zahra added matter o factly.

“You took the pegasi out in that storm!” Their mother shouted furiously.

“No, why would we take out the pegasi? We took out the dragons of course.” Aahmes told his mother defensively.

“The weather is much too harsh for the pegasus to be out.”  Zahra and Ptoloemy said in unison to their mother.

“Pardon me your majesty, but there is someone is waiting to see you in the grand hall.” Talila said saving the children from their mother’s not normally short temper.

“Could it be father?” The children asked Talila. She partially ignored their question for their own sake as she braided her long soft glimmering black hair waiting for the queen to respond. 

“Did they give you their name or state their business?” Orithyia asked turning away from her children. The triplets tried to slip away while they had no attention drawn to them. “Stay right there we are not yet finished here” Orithyia said harshly. The children stood still as statues to keep from their mother’s wrath.  

“Why, no madam the man did not, but strangely he looks like a beggar.” Talila answered back to the queen.  

“A beggar in this weather makes absolutely no sense.” Zahra said thinking out loud.

“This matter does not concern any of you three, now off to your quarters and dry off.” Orithyia told her children.

“Yes mother.” Ptolemy said

“I will.” Aahmes replied

“Of course mother” Zahra said

The children left just as they were told to; as they did the queen headed into the grand hall. She moved quickly almost running to the hall with the mysterious visitor. When she reached the hall she slowed; walking gracefully as a queen should. As she neared the end of the hall she began to see a figures shadow. 

The man was thin and frail looking. His travels left him soaked to the bone. He spoke with a quiver in his voice.

“What an interesting day. My queen you look to be very upset or perhaps worried, may I ask why?” He asked concerned

“It’s nothing thank you for your concern.” Orithyia responded defensively

“I am sorry for offending you. I hope you understand why I care.” The beggar apologized.

“I understand better than you may think Chronos. My king you have been gone for fifteen years. Why did you leave? Why for so long? Why return today?” She began to ramble.   

“Your questions will all be answered in time. I am shocked you so easily recognized me.” Chronos said this wife almost chuckling. 

“Only one person has ever been able to see through my visage. I am truly happy to see you." The queen said as tears streamed down her face. She embraced her husband for a brief moment. 

"Are you here to stay Chronos?" She asked 

"Yes, darling I will remain in the kingdom to continue the training of our children." He told his wife, "I will take my throne next to you my queen." He stated certainly 

"Please my lord go to your chambers and get ready for supper, be sure to be down in the dining hall in an hour." The queen said hurrying her husband up the stairs. 

He went right to his and the queen's camber and found that nothing had changed from the day he had left. All his belongings were left right he had them last; everything was kept clean and dusted. He dried himself off and dressed in his favorite robes. He placed is golden crown on his head for the first time in fifteen years. The lost king had finally returned and soon everyone would know.

After exactly an hour he sat at the head of table in the dining hall and waited for his wife and children. The three children came down the staircase quickly excitedly chattering of a surprise their mother had for them. They walked toward the dining hall and instantly stopped at the open doorway staring at the man at the head of the table. He looked up from his plate to the children in the doorway and said “Zahra, Aahmes, and Ptolemy it has been far too long, come here and give your father a hug.”

“I knew father would return to us “Zahra said through tears. 

All three children were overwhelmed with tears. Excited to see their father the triplets ran to embrace him for the first time. After a moment the queen walked in to the dining hall. 

“I see you have all been reacquainted with one another.” She said as she walked toward them.The family sat at the talbe as the supper was brought from the kitchen.

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The reunited family sat in the throne room as King Chronos told his family all he encountered over the past fifteen years. He explained how he had left to learn new figthing styles and other cultural nuonces of the many kingdoms so that he could teach his children. He avoided conversation over the prophecy. The children could not wait to continue learning different cultures, languages, and magic. Their father had had a long week and needed to retire  for the night. He told the children to be sure to retire early as well for they had to be awake before dawn for instruction. 

Kasey Miriam 2015

Reviews

[Amesie]

Quite a few double words and slight mistakes you should read through this again carefully. Hoping you post more of this story soon. One thing is the queen seems to harsh on her children instead of being so angry maybe change her to sort of down trodden and weary at that bit then I agree the kings homecoming should be more emotional. Also the queen says "stay right there you three" then says "go away its none of your business" that stopped my flow of reading slightly. Love your work.

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you I edit very slowly and have not looked at this chapter much yet. I will keep your advice in mind. thank you

[Ryan Henderson]

I like this chapter, I liked it all, however I do have one thing to say in way of critique; I feel that the queen did not express very much emotion upon seeing her long lost husband for fifteen years, she refused to remarry and even travelled to distant kingdoms to stop wars over her because the king was gone, and she hoped so much that he would come back to her, and he now did, so I do not know why she did not express more emotion. BUT other than that, very good chapter, I will be waiting for you to add more :)

[Kasey Miriam]

I agree. I need to fix that a bit. She was rather statue like her.

[Stephen]

Now, I got a chance to criticize you, that`s all what you ever wanted to hear .. *Wink*

This chapter`s very nice, some statements are well cooked up by your fluffy soft hands, made me chuckle. Umm .. I think, "Zara" is seemed too unbelievable a Nirvana of hotness like her beautiful mother "Orithiya" .. I think, I`m very lucky to feel the raged warmed fires of two hot chicks .. *Wink*

Let`s come to the point now ..

First off, "He went right to his and the queen's camber" .. In this line, I think, it`s "CHAMBER" not "Camber" .. isn`t it?"

Secondly, the chapter was all going good but I think, a SUDDEN entry of "Chronos" .. Umm, turned all the story-line. I think, his entry should have .. like a storm with a silence but much echoes around the world ~~~ holding the realm of lighting over the sky ~~~ burning some fires in all lives ~~~ digging the earth with his hotness ~~~ stirring the cups of his sensations around the whole world after all, it`s been 15 years ..he`s never put his hot steps in his kingdom ~~~ turning the lights off heading to the bed giving the real temptations to his glorious "Queen" all the night so that she could feel, she wasn`t away from her hottest king but with him all the time like the clouds always stayed with the opened wide sky, No matter it`s a day or a dark nights ~~~ like a moon never leaves the hands of darkness and a sun never run away from the sun-filled lights ... so, how can the king? No way!!
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So, yeah ... his entry should have ... like this, to be honest, his entry has revealed all the mystery but you`re a great writer and great writer never let the mystery reveal before the end of the life .. before the end of the passion ... before the end of their stuffs... isn`t it? And moreover, I don`t find any impact of a king on his kingdom the way you brought back his beats to the world ~~ brought back his presence in his world. Umm, I know that you better know, how to twist up your thoughts blending the taste of your themes with your love ~~ making this chapter more cool in reading so, yeah ... I think, you should re-read and re-edit this chapter keeping ""Chronos" mystery .. "A MYSTERY."

I don`t find any error in your grammar except one word that i`ve already mentioned you. You have to put some fire in this chapter too like you`ve already put in your earlier ones.

Special Note :

"You know what? I believe, i`m your friend so, you`re mine ... which`s what makes me helping you out ~~ telling you my VIRTUAL thoughts what i`ve got reading this chapter because you know what? A writer`s life`s filled with thrones and it`s up to a write how he/she turns all the stones into the flowers walking over the ridges of life ~~ reaching the next shore to the world. There`s a millions of people sitting out there ~~ waiting to make you criticize you ~~ pushing you down to the ground and I believe, a great writer never let them take any chance to hustle him/her down with the natural forces of words because he/she knows very well that they all too want to make an impact in this world just like he/she wants to ... with some talent of talent so, they run to reach the doors of success defeating him/her down but how to turn all the red in blue and blue in red beating them first before they make him/her feel defeated!! *Wink*

My apologies, if this time .. my words make you feel upset but yeah .. I could`ve told you that i`ve enjoyed this chapter, lovely write, what a beautiful theme and blah .. blah .. blah ... but what`d you have get? Nothing .. because you HAVE to hear what you, sometimes, never expect cus, this`s what`d help you touching the sky.

All the best for your re-editing if you do so!! ;-)

[Kasey Miriam]

You are absolutely right I don't like this chapter much. In order to start the real plot I needed the king to return, but I think I told to much of his story. There are many more mysteries and untold stories from other characters. My favorite is the elf's story. I will try and fix this chapter. Thank you for your thoughts

[Stephen]

I`m glad you love my review .. Ummm, you know what? This chapter`s not bad or badly written. Nope!! I love it but what the thing you should change is .. "The entry of Chronos" ... because right after the entry of the king, all the theme`s twisted off and just turned all the ways to interpret this chapter or read this chapter with the actual theme ... but when I read the last phrase in your chapter ..I think, it grips up the theme back because I like how you commenced, "King`d gone to learn some new techniques" ..sounds very good!! But ... if you re-read your this chapter not just a one time but millions of times then you can intertwine all the words, statements with the new edition ... Yeah, I do agree with your words and am glad to hear you`ll fix this chapter ;) You`re truly a very kind soul, Kasey ... I always love making some conversations with ya and it`s been a pleasure to me to meet you and read your stuffs since the day I met ya ;)

[A. Amos]

Your story is going great, truly enjoyed...

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you Amos. Glad it is enjoyed

[A. Amos]

you're most welcome my friend

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good chapter. I like the reappearance of the father. I like the way you are making the Queen decide to train her children to defend the homeland. A very good chapter. I hope to read more.
Coyote

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you and there will surely be more