innocence

fear does not exist 

an everlasting question

why take it away

Kasey Miriam 2015

Reviews

[Nusquam Esse]

This is good, although I think the last line may be lacking impact, probably because of the 'may' makes it too passive. While senryu do not require 'cutting' words like haiku does, it is still a good idea to make one of the transitions in the poem hit hard. I personally would have gone with something like
"Once fear never was
an everlasting question
Haunting me always"
but that changes the meaning by quite a bit.

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you. This was writen ages ago, I try not to look back at things too early. Thank you for the constuctive feed back! I will suely be editing my old works.

[¿]

Hard and tight thought served in such an innocent way! I'm never good at well restricted verse of poetry and here you did amazing...thanks for sharing this good read☺!

[Kasey Miriam]

thank you for reading

[¿]

Heartedly welcomed!

[Stephen]

I think, reading your stuffs, I can raise my skills at writing "Haiku's" too cus, i've founded you the one writer here who writes beautiful "Haiku's"...

Yeah, your right. Fear really doesn't exist but we got a fear of fears which always stumble us achieving what we want to in our life. Having a fear of fear's been a biggest roadblock amid the path of our lives. What a beautiful mail you sent to people. I hope, your words'd be helpful to overcome the fear of fears.

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you so much. Your kind words mean so much. I have always loved the three lines of poetry. They pack a huge punch with just a few words.

[Stephen]

It's always my pleasure.
Yeah, it's appeared in your stuffs that how you love writing 3 lines or poetry's in a new form of artistry. Am honored to have your profile...Heyy, if am not wasting your time, then you can give me some tips about ..how to write "Haiku's", I always love learning from talented people?

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Very compelling, senryus can say so much in just a few well chosen words and you chose them well

[Kasey Miriam]

thank you.

[anne p. murray- LadeeAnne]

You're welcome

[A. Amos]

This is short yet very compelling and last line keep you haunting to find an answer...sharp, smart and wit write

[Kasey Miriam]

many of my friends are shocked with what I can do with about 11 words. Thank you for the review. Before I started I didnt think these were all that good

[A. Amos]

It's not only you even when Kafka finish his first work he was also reluctant, truth is everyone is and once you get one good review or remark you are set for a new direction...trust me you are very good keep doing what you do the best:)

[Kasey Miriam]

Many thanks!

[My-two-lives]

I really like this; it's short and to the point, and the last line, - despite what others might have said, for example Nusquam Esse, - for me, does hit hard. I feel that this is an interesting and strangely wonderful little poem, and it's very pretty. Well done.

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you so much!

[My-two-lives]

You're welcome. :)

[captain]

so good..... so short but so profound! I like it!

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you so much!