Loss Clock

Loss Clock

A Poem by DaniElle LaPointe
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exlporing grief through free form

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>the sun refuses to rise and fall according to my pain
and now I’ve stowed away on
three trips around that glowing orb
I scribble grief words  
As they surface without use of voluntary muscles
pulled from me by this force
rolling around me
thick and solid
not a wind
but a specific gravity
bringing me to my
broken knees
chapped and scarred
 
I am at a loss
I am at loss
you went through a windshield little brother
so now I go through
one with you everyday
 
glass shards and all…
 
piercing my memories
moments when the sun lit
your eyes
and painted you tan
that damn burning star
distant
pulling
 
I’ll set my clock
to something
else

© 2023 DaniElle LaPointe


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DaniElle LaPointe
Free form ignore grammar etc...

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sorry to hear about the loss.... i actualyl read this poem twice. I waned to make sure absorbed everything, and i'm glad i did... it was the lines I am at a loss, and the revealing of your brother.. that made me think, maybe i should go back and read the begginning now that i know that. I like how it captivated me, then made me want to understand more. very emotional piece your heart is exposed. thank you for sharing

much love n respect

-Lalli



Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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One day at a time. Here is a poem I did for you. Much love sent your way.
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God only knows how long we can go on missing
Our loved ones
Why does God let us grieve to a point of pain?
Within our hearts
Living in the crossroads of shadows
They still follow, following close behind

Thoughts and memories
Will never fall behind
While he holds onto you
Holding your hand while you walk and talk
The talk, he smiles at you, tugging upon
Your beautiful heart

Every time, you see,
Feeling the warmth of a rising sun
Remember the vibrant colors
Your eyes unfold upon

Today, everyday before you rest to sleep
Close your eyes; you will hear his sweet voice
Whisper upon your ear
I Love You Sis

Art


Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

thank you for sharing your thoughts and touching our innermost feelings
one day I hope to read more of your magic and not just your sorrow
I am waiting the return of your glowing sun


Posted 16 Years Ago


It is hard for me to write comments on such a deeply personal expression of grief. Three years... Your words scrape so deeply into my heart and make me wish that I could have given my life in exchange for his so you would never have to know such pain. I am so sorry...

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am so sorry for your loss and your grief, I lost my son in a car accident too, so I can somewhat feel what it took to write this heart touching poem. My prayers to you. Debileah

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is very deep and personal, and leaves such an aching sense of loss.....exceptionally written....

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I acknowledge your loss and thank you for sharing this honest and thought provoking poem.

Expression is freedom and this poetic rendering has helped me take some much needed steps to resolving my own grief issues.

Thank you for challenging my thoughts and inspiring my poetic spirit.

This is a beautiful , evocative and unpretentious poem. I honour what you have accomplished.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i'm sorry for your loss.

this is beautiful. such a fitting poem to grieve for your brother. third stanza was my favorite. i loved it.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This shows emotion without pushing the envelope... Nice!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

one gets the feeling when reading this that it was authentically written beneath a dark cloud of grief... it is very human in that it speaks with cold rationality, like the eye in a storm of mourning.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sorry to hear about the loss.... i actualyl read this poem twice. I waned to make sure absorbed everything, and i'm glad i did... it was the lines I am at a loss, and the revealing of your brother.. that made me think, maybe i should go back and read the begginning now that i know that. I like how it captivated me, then made me want to understand more. very emotional piece your heart is exposed. thank you for sharing

much love n respect

-Lalli



Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 21, 2008
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DaniElle LaPointe
DaniElle LaPointe

Calgary, Canada



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I have returned to my first love, poetry, since the death of my only sibling Aaron. I write poetry, fiction, and non-fiction. I like to explore grief, loss, and the healing process. I write as things .. more..

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