The Poor Crow

Love is just love, it can never explained.

O sweetie! You failed to comprehend,

my love for you is so fervid,

you couldn't catch glimpse of my affection,

which seems charming and avid...

 

 

 

if you would reunite with someone else in the future,

your pictures from my walls,

i will have a wild urge to throw..

it will be harder for me to swallow this sense of betrayal,

i would evidently die,

and will become a brusque crow..

 

 

 

afterwards your marriage, i would approach  your home on daily basis,

i am threatening, caw! caw! noise,

i'll make entire day,

""how to get rid of this bloody crow"",

you, couple would only pray..

 

 

 

i'll be the playmate of your kids,

i would sing songs for them in my egregious tone..

i am convinced they won't be really fond of,

but they'll enquire, ""who is this creature, completely unknown"" ?..

 

 

 

your other half will get exasperated,

he'll surely take out his mauser from your gun-locker..

but i will be dismayed on seeing weapon of my adversary,

i'll tease, ""i have wings which do not need any door-knocker""..

 

 

 

since i will be targeted by the sniper, in case i die,

i will question your husband, ""why did you kill me again""..

""you  murdered me, when you married my love""

""even  today  you gave me a similar pain"" !!

 

 

Author's Note

This poem is based on the conversation that had taken place between two young lovers, that how worst the life is going to be for the boy if their bonding could not last for so long. How scary the life would be without his soulmate.
I had been given a task to present this chat in poetic structure in front of you guys. It was not so easy for me as i had to keep it shorter in terms of content. Few of you guys would find it is so funny while some of you would feel that it is a cute one and few will find this piece so emotional. But the moment i finished this, i was literally sympathize with the character that has been portrayed. Your reviews can help him out in finding peace to his soul. I really do not know whether he is alive or not. Read it from core of your heart.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is so imaginative & brilliant! It makes me want to write something in a similar vein . . . I love the idea of following someone you love, someone who rejected you, by shape-shifting into another type of being. Great details to show us the trajectory of this futile love situation, with the crow following his lost love's life & family. I don't see this as funny or sad. It's just a great story of empowerment, as to how we can still be in touch with people we are not in touch with . . . there are other dimensions we can use to be close to someone we can't be near.

[Sami Khalil]

A thrilling story-poem with sad tones and vengeful undertones. It grips the reader but has a lot of romantic lines. Love, marriage are never easy and they can cause heartaches and headaches. Kudos.

[Abhishek Asthana]

Most amazing review yet... Hehe... " love cause heartaches and headaches ".. Thanks for understanding the aura of the poem !

[Sami Khalil]

Yes siiiirrrr. You are welcome.

[Ruth]

An interesting piece, unique in its approach...I like your style Abhishek :)

[Abhishek Asthana]

Yeah that was the short story crafted into a poem by me and i had no idea how it would sound at that point in time, but it worked... Thanks for your kind words, Ruth !!

[light and ashes]

Life can be a bit of tyrant.... How we recover from it.... and move on from it and move forward through it says everything about who we are..
Nice write.

[Abhishek Asthana]

That's really true. Thanks for reading !

[light and ashes]

You're welcome! :)

[Rye]

WOW!! You are so poetic, I really enjoyed this piece, i found it quite emotional and intriguing.

[Abhishek Asthana]

Thanks a ton for your words. Attempted to draft a balance between a story and a poem in this piece. I am glad you find it emotional though strong emotions are depicted in a hidden way.

[Raghib]

awesome poem . loved the way it ended with the narrator asking the man of why did he have to ill hi twice .

[Tanya Ramsail]

Totally loved it

[Abhishek Asthana]

Thank you so much for reaching

[M]

I absolutely loved this poem! This style of writing is very similar to my favorite author Edgar Allen Poe.

[Abhishek Asthana]

Thanks so much for your kind visit...Sir Edward was a great poet... even I have read some of his work... Thanks for reading this one

[pragya gaur]

Really appreciate your way of imagination ...Abhishek ji....You write very well

[Abhishek Asthana]

Thanks so much for your kind words pragya