Deep Love

sometimes we fell in love with the most unexpected person because that person loved you when you could not love yourself...

Might be i was an amateur, beyond romantic prospect,

That exquisite encounter, still i recollect.

Your captivating smile,my vexed expressions,

Steadily, we had learnt some combined endearing lessons.

Despite being contrary to each other, we fell in love,

Since then we are ardent, like pretty pair of dove.

Abstaining from daily chores, all midnight discourse,

It was altogether charismatic and alluring force.

The undergone changes led to the brutal killing of heart,

Love never ceased after wrangles, that is a surpassing part.

This bonding is analogous to a felicific tree, while our credence is the root,

Manifestly, this story will succeed,we are being optimistic and resolute.

Reviews

[Anjali]

The words you've used here, are so strong and so mature! And the rhyming scheme is just amazing. Thirdly, the emotions and love you have put in this piece is.... Extraordinary. I'm sorry I'm reviewing this a bit late. But I really loved this one. Keep writing!

[Abhishek Asthana]

No worries if you reviewed late... what matters it should impact my readers the same way which I desire when i add any new piece... thanks a lot anjali

[Anjali]

Haha.... So true, you are welcome!

[Rye]

this is so touching and beautiful.

[Abhishek Asthana]

Thanks so much for reading !!

[Anushka joshi]

It's really so touching and carving our feelings ....... really I had a deep love with this poem now

[Abhishek Asthana]

Hehe,,,I am glad you found this poem this much impactful... Well, thanks a lot for your kind review, Anushka !!

[Tanya Ramsail]

Oh my god
this is so amazing

[Abhishek Asthana]

Thanks a lot for reading... I am glad you liked it

[Rashi Jain]

This is so beautiful.💕
There was such a beautiful smile on my face while reading this.
'Since then we are ardent, like pretty pair of dove'
So Beautiful 💕

[Abhishek Asthana]

That's exactly what my object was...I want that smile on each of my reader's face... now I guess I succeed up to some extent

[Rashi Jain]

Yes, surely you did.😊

[L.C. Jarrette]

Love never ceased after wrangles, that is a surpassing part.

=>this would be my favorite line. love it so much

[Abhishek Asthana]

and mine is ..."This bonding is analogous to a felicific tree, while our credence is the root,"... thanks a lot for reviewing :)

[L.C. Jarrette]

you're welcome sir...

[Anjali]

Thank you for sharing this poem with me Abhishek.

Here I would be a constructive critic:

"sometimes we fell in love with the most unexpected person because that person loved you when you could not love yourself..."

It should be

"sometimes we fall in love with the most unexpected person because that person love you when you could not love yourself..."

Apart from this, your poem expresses deep emotions and optimism.

Regards,
Anjali

[Abhishek Asthana]

sorry... not agreed...because what you have written ""sometimes we fall in love with the most unexpected person because that person love you when you could not love yourself..."

here it should be "that person loves" instead of love... since person is a singular noun... and i have it written it in a past tense... about those events that had happened in the past... thanks anyway...

[pia]

As constructive criticism you might wanna work on sentence construction a lil bit
Otherwise i think you have great vocabulary and a wonderful way of portraying your emotions and your ideas in your work
I loved it
It was deep and heart warming

[Abhishek Asthana]

thank you so much for your kind words pia

[apennylate]

Again, syllable by syllable bliss... Charismatic and alluring word choice, still... As well as brutal rhymes flying on doves wings... No wrong... Resolutely penned...

[Abhishek Asthana]

sir, you have your own unique way of reviewing which i really admire,,, hahaha,,, thanks alot for your visit,, appreciation means a lot :)

[apennylate]

I try to convey the unique feel I get from each work when I review, if you liked what I said... You have yourself to thank for it, as I can only mirror the brilliance contained within each poem...

[Hope]

Its a wonderful poem...
Your writing skills are great...
Keep writing....:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

not really,, still i am learning,, very pleased tto know you liked this piece... thanks a lot :)

[Hope]

You are welcome...
A great amateur...:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

hahaha,, sounds funny