I miss my mother

Truly said, no matters how old we get we always want our mum when we don't feel good...

Mum, o my mum where have you gone ?After your departure, life seems as vigorous cyclone...



I do remember the days when we were together,
Thereafter what almighty did cut down my feather.
Sometime what I felt they took you in fallacy,
How could they were so rude, it was not their legacy.
Just thought what was amiss, mine everything was finished,
We too were a happy family, I was a child unblemished.



Mum, o my mum where have you gone ?
After your departure, life seems as vigorous cyclone...



Missed you sorely in my highs and lows,
If I orate a lot about it, certainly my tears flows.
Eyes are searching yet, memories are still vivid,
Do protect me again when I behave like timid.
Now I am displeased, this entire world looks dumb,
Promise me, u would return, or stay there I 'll come.



Mum, o my mum where have you gone ?
After your departure, life seems as vigorous cyclone !!..

Reviews

[Najam Us Saher]

Missed you sorely in my highs and lows,
If I orate a lot about it, certainly my tears flows.
Eyes are searching yet, memories are still vivid,
Do protect me again when I behave like timid.
Now I am displeased, this entire world looks dumb,
Promise me, u would return, or stay there I 'll come. Mum, o my mum where have you gone ?
After your departure, life seems as vigorous cyclone !!..
I can relate to these lines. I can understand the emotions and the misery in this poem. I loved this one truly expressed those feelings.

[Abhishek Asthana]

Yups... this poem is really close to my heart... tells about some sudden pains which are sometimes unexplainable...M glad you liked

[Najam Us Saher]

I can understand even if there are no words said.....

[Anushka joshi]

Its very emotional and heart breaking poem
Nice work !!

[Abhishek Asthana]

Thanks Anushka, the poem is dedicated to my mother !!

[Rye]

so sorry that you lost your mother, I still have my mom, I lost my dad when i was really little so I know the feeling of losing someone that you love.

[Abhishek Asthana]

Almighty has been so cruel to most of us but we remain with no options left except for remembering the quality time we had spent with our loved ones... Thanks for reading !!

[Rye]

not a problem

[Ruth]

When we miss our loved ones life seems heavy, this I completely relate to and understand, an emotive poem that shows a genuine, loving bond :)

[Abhishek Asthana]

Sometimes penning down your own feelings become so hard to express especially when it comes to human loss... And losing a mother so early is like loss of brightness in life... Thanks for your kind review !!

[pragya gaur]

The way u express your feelings ....I think your mom must be proud of you where ever she is....I can understand the feeling of being away from mom ....Can understand it is very painful...Made me emotional n made me fly back to those days...Great work abhishek ji

[Joey Nizz]

Your writing made me call my mother to tell her I love her!
Your work is really beautiful, Thanks for sharing :)

[Abhishek Asthana]

what else i would demand, if you want to display your feelings in front of mother after going through this piece of writing...its a huge compliment for me... you made my day... thank you so much

[Joey Nizz]

And you made mine! :)
And it would be my absolute honor to write something about her, shes my one and only.

Thanks bro :')

[pia]

This was so heartfelt.....felt like crying
It was a poem written with raw emotions and i love it !!!

[Abhishek Asthana]

to be very honest pia... even i was so much crying when i was writing it down... and it took so long to finish this one... this poem is very close tio my heart as i miss my mother badly... every moment... thanks a lot for reading !!

[pia]

Im very sorry for your loss
Nothing and no one can imagine your pain
Your mother looks down at from heaven and im sure she proud of you
And how talented you are

[Abhishek Asthana]

its okay and extremely thanks for your kind words...

[L.C. Jarrette]

i love this poem. makes me feel grateful that my mother is still here beside me.

[Abhishek Asthana]

exactly... and always keep showing this gratefulness to the deity... stay blessed... thank you for reading :)

[L.C. Jarrette]

you're welcome..

[Zoya]

"After your departure, life seems as vigorous cyclone..." amazing line.
This was such a heartfelt, touching poem...I'm sorry you had to go through this much pain...very well written!

[Abhishek Asthana]

sometimes the space generated by the loss of someone remains vacant throughout the life...it's okay... i am just glad you liked it !!

[Zoya]

True...you're most welcome

[apennylate]

Vigorous cyclone, what a woefully amazing line... I orate the woeful ornaments of hate... You might be fast becoming one of my favorite writers on this site... Kudo's on the stellar syllable and meter perfection... A cyclone of a ride... Vigorously penned...

[Abhishek Asthana]

thanks again for the honor sir, you have already became one of my favorite writer... i really like the way you open-heartedly write the poems... there is a lot to learn from you,,, you are an intrepid writer

[apennylate]

Thank you again for making such wonderful wordage... You truly humble me... Let us learn from each other...! You are also a trend-setting writer, my friend...

[Hope]

Its truly a touching poem...
The repetition of the lines is nice.
Your feelings are well expressed.
Your mom will be proud of you.....:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

i just wish is if i would have been seeing her in front of me and she would have been feeling proud... thank you so much for reading

[Hope]

My pleasure...