Transformation

About some mistakes which are happened due to sudden changes, that should be taken care off..

Why do some guys appraise relations as stairs,,
Imparts egocentricism and despair..


Beloveds thoroughly become self-absorbed,,
After one stage, no one would engrossed...


No matters to then, how much we do oblations,,
At the end what would get, only humiliation...


Why did they play with string of emotions,,
When shattered badly, was painful for every loving notion...


Till the time I would survive, let's everyone see,,
You would understand my worth, when you will losing me...


You left me alone totally, in a strugglesome flood,,
Then too my soul will defend this affection till last drop of blood !!

Reviews

[apennylate]

Deft twists of drops and pops... Loved the double commaas... I do not know why, but I did, haha... Absorbingly penned...

[Abhishek Asthana]

thanks you so much silente, i am glad you liked it :)

[apennylate]

You ever so welcome, AA

[Priyanshi]

Beautiful poem.....and well portrayed, Abhishek.

[Abhishek Asthana]

thank you so much priyanshi... i appreciate your words

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure.

[Raj Sahu]

“Till the time I would survive, let's everyone see,,
You would understand my worth, when you will losing me...
You left me alone totally, in a strugglesome flood,,
Then too my soul will defend this affection till last drop of blood !!”

This part is amazing. Well written. Keep it up.

[Abhishek Asthana]

thanks brother,, its good to know u like it

[Wajiha Nayeem]

very true and wonderful...

[Abhishek Asthana]

thank u so much

[Hope]

Its very true....
We will appreciate the worth of something only when we lose it,
Great work, Abhishek.......:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

yups,, this is based on true emotions,, thanks a lot for reading

[Hope]

My plesure......:)

[Surya]

You said truth and I agree with it...I liked it...:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

yes i believe so... thank you surya

[Ayush Mishra]

beautifully expressed with the help of
rhymic-words..
But "After one stage, no one would engrossed"...is not true....upto my extent...

[Abhishek Asthana]

This is not pointing out to a particular... might have not been witnessed luckily... thanks anyway !!

[Najam Us Saher]

You would understand my worth, when you will losing me... This is so true. This poem shows your feelings towards a relationship which hurts you a lot and you try to sustain it till the end. Beautifully expressed your emotions.

[Abhishek Asthana]

Thanks a lot...consists of some truth of the matters which are indigestable...

[Najam Us Saher]

I understand.....You're welcome ☺