Silent Death

Silently, the air has died in our grasp

Perished away over the cliff’s edge

Blown off course, down into the sea

Swallowed whole, in the beasts stomach

 

Reviews

[Brandon Lee]

I might have to disagree with CrimsonInk use of sweet and soft in their reviews. There is nothing sweet or soft about this poem. These four lines of bitterness wrapped in such beauty of prose and imagery is epic in its size. Being that it is indeed only four lines and able to pack such a punch. To me, it is like the death of life ambition.
The reaction I get from reading the poem itself, is what the poem itself inscribes: "Silently, the air has died in our grasp". If this make any sense to you.

-Brandon

[Ravenskald]

*sigh* Kat you have this habit of putting together beautiful little four line poems which as noted below pack a punch of their own. yes I know at some point I'm going to have to dip into reading one of your stories if I want a theme developed :) and
OMG "Silently, the air has died in our grasp"
what a fantastic opening line

~Raven

[Dionysus Cain]

Simple but eye opening, the ending made it elaborate.

[FrikinFrancesca]

Short, Sweet and amazing.

[Legion]

Darkly impressive. An apostrophe in beasts in the last line though.

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i definitely must once again insert the power of short poetry by pointing out your wonderful example. thank you for proving the strength of picky diction. great read.

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I think this is very beautiful. Sweet, soft and descriptive. I love the last line, "Swallowed whole, in the beasts stomach" A very nice touch to the whole piece.