Don't Know

Don’t know what to do

Don’t know what to say

Don’t know how to make it okay

 

Same s**t every single day

Can’t put up with life no longer

Feels like I’m slowly dying inside

 

Want to ask for help

But don’t know how

Given up on the hope I once had

 

I’m alone with no one to save me

Was born to survive by myself

Learned to fend off the wolves

 

Reviews

[Ravenskald]

Simple and to the point. It reads like a song and would work well as a lyric.
"Learned to fend off the wolves"
A good thing :) , I count 2 here already (or at least pictures therof)
I'll go and have a look at your other work .

[Texas]

Intresting poem. I know what it's like to be all alone. Doing the same thing day in and day out. Wanting help, but not knowing how to ask for it.

[Marianne]

Hey Kat this is so impressive ... I feel every single word you say. And as people said below ... it is a pain filled poem, full of truth and anger

[Alessander]

I agree with invs. the say/okay/day definitely belong in the same quatrain, but I understand trying to make all of the stanzas fit into 3 lines. I would like to see the rhymes continue through out, if it's only sprinkled here and there. Also, maybe extend the wolf metaphor/imagery?

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i appreciate the way you've expressed your feelings here. i have one small technical criticism, though. the first 3 have a rhythm and rhyme to them, setting up an expectation of more to follow. might i suggest you change a word or two in the first verse so that it breaks that pattern?

[Illuminatix]

I feel your anger and pain... You have captured the emotions very well, bravo!

[The Tao of Bri]

This is such a poem of Truth...

[CLUTZ]

love this poem.

[Mark D. Chevalier]

This is a very pain-filled poem, and could easily be adapted to fit each new reader. How many times we all feel trapped, with nowhere to go and nothing to rely upon. As the reader I could feel the tension pouring from every verse. Excellent work!
Mark