Death is upon your doorstep

In a time when mankind had no clue

Of what the future would bring

Still so innocent in their foolish minds

Not knowing that death was to come knocking

That life was on the brink of extinction

And they couldn’t do a damn thing to stop it

 

They laughed, they cried, night and day

Never properly enjoying anything they did

Angry at the little things, what a shame

When they were the things that mattered

They should have opened their eyes to see

That the end is when all becomes clear

 

You live your life so utterly clueless

Only realizing your defeat when it’s too late

Can’t do nothing to fix your past

It’s all gone and done with, if you ask me

The final moment is coming right up

Hop on the train, we’re off to hell

 

Reviews

[JadedSparrow]

"You live your life so utterly clueless
Only realizing your defeat when it's too late"

Wonderful lines here. The sad thing is, even with this knowledge, people are still distracted by the most unimportant things. I enjoyed this poem from start to finish. Im glad I stopped by to check it out...

JS

[Marianne]

I like it so much ... This is the story of everyone, the story of day and night.

[Cary]

I really enjoyed reading that! I thought it was really well written, flowed nicely, and had a deep message. That last line really caught my attention. Nice job!

[bob, small b. aka invs]

some very true thoughts here. people are often so distracted by petty things that they forget what's really important. i hope you don't mind a little grammatical correction. the line 'can't do nothing to fix your past' is incorrect grammatically. it should either be 'can do nothing' or 'can't do anything'.

[Rachel DeHart]

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I really like this...
It's a wonderful reminder.

[siri]

you are.....sick with it! ur mind is so brilliant and u present it perfect. Your stuff always inspires me thanks for what you have givin me this is for sure a favorite! ahhhhh wait hold on.......okay sory i needed to read it again.....haha your .....like......oh nevermind i would just be repeating myself! haha high five!

[Broken Warrior]

"Hop on the train we're off to hell..." that line caught me. Love the poem, very true, its clear its inspired by life and presented by experience. Congrats!

[He@ther!]

This is a great poem with a good message:)
Very true and inspiring with a concept that all of us need to be reminded of from time to time:)

-Heather

[The Tao of Bri]

I like this a lot...a great reminder to us all that life is short and there is no time like the rpesent to change oneself...for we cannot help anyone until we do.

[S.J.Floreen]

This poem is too true of human nature. No one realizes what they have until it's too late.