Sorry isn't good enough

For half my life you held me on a leash

Never let me do what normal girls did

Kept me home on every Saturday night

No matter how long I’d cry and protest

 

Life was never fair to me from the beginning

You were my shadow, my fear at night

Pray, as I did, never seemed to work out

You were always ready to make me stop

 

As the years passed you became more aggressive

Used up your time to break up my hopes

I dreamed of an angel who would rescue my heart

But he was never quick enough, I always gave up

 

You’re my boogeyman, what makes my nightmares come true

You rip up my heart while I beg you to stop

You should be a figure of trust, someone to protect me

But you ruined that relationship, now I’m just disgusted by you

 

Reviews

[WordMaster]

Although I feel the emotion behind the poem,
it lacks rhythm and a few of the lines might be better if shorten

Sometimes when we're trying to express a personal emotion, it's more important to get the feeling out then to care about how the poem turns out � and that's okay.

If the poem is you, that's all it has to be

[Ray Hamilton]

When a normal man loves a woman he usually has no leash on her
I wish you "True Love "
A man with True Love for you will treat you right
To be loved is the most precious gift, anyone's heart could ever hope for.
Sad but well written Ray { Not a Poet }

[MagiCrystal]

good poem so deep and real... awesome.. Mg

[sutoraika]

wow...i like your approach to your pain. very sad and beautiful.

[Veritiel]

It does sound personal, even as if you intend it to be a protest against your own father (could as easily be your mother but somehow the father figure fits best).

To my liking it seems to be unfinished, as if left unconcluded. Maybe this is a reflection on your own feelings regarding the matter; an unresolved issue in your own psyche.

[Becca]

i really like this one. it reminds me of the relationship i have with my mom. she never lets me do what i want to do or let me go out. she keeps me home. we use to be close but as i got older and more independent she got more aggressive. now i disgust her

[Asha Raphael]

that is so sad . . honey . . don't let anybody stop you . . a soul like yours always makes the world a better place. i liked the piece but i'm sorry for your pain . .
but never forget . . . we only exist now; not yesterday, not tomorrow . . . i have one word to say to you:
SHINE . .

[Legion]

Meant to rate this a 100, but I accidently hit the button before I got the mouse all the way across the bar. Sorry about that.

[Legion]

So sad (and a bit frightening). Not sure who it is about though, but I'm guessing a father perhaps. What an antithesis to Father's Day if so. Sorry for you pain. A good write though.