Oasis dreams

Lately I’ve had dreams of faraway places

Of tropical islands and darkly tanned faces

I want to get away from it all, just spread my wings

To an oasis in the jungle with green ferns and springs

I’m tired of rushing and feeling all this stress

I need to get rid of this life, to clear up this mess

One plane ticket to the horizon, I can see the ocean

My destination is coming up; it’s all in slow motion

Dive into the clear water, hold my breath, one two three

I’ve reached my resting place; I can tell the world I’m free

 

Reviews

[sconzey]

The rhyme is elegant, not at all forced. Overall the choice of wording is good, I'm not so sure about "oasis in the jungle," but sure... ^_^

It's not too short, not too long. The choice of a large font size was good, but my browser breaks the last two lines, so maybe one or two sizes smaller. (that's a resolution of 1280x1024)

[huma]

The Ocean, she calls to us all...very nice. I didn't even notice it rhymed until I read the other reviews...interesting. Overall, great voice...like a sigh

[Rambling Prose]

An oasis indeed & a place we all need to slip away to. To often we never get there, thanks for taking me along on the journey.

Nicely penned...

[Cliff Rhodes]

Hello Kat-Marie,
I always like dreams and poems about somewhere else and deep clear blue water. Have a nice day. Cliff

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I sense the natural flow of words, always a sign of sincere writing. Thank you for sharing.

[Bonnie]

Lovely poem.

Good images and relaxing 'get away'.

Thanks

[Antonio Valentino]

I wonder if people who live in paradise, vacation in, Ohio, to get away from it all?
Nahhhhh. Some things, you never get tired of, right. Loved the poem. Thanks for the trip.
Next time, my treat.

Antone

[shadadakiya]

that's how i feel just need hot sun beach and a peace of mind and some real fun i love its great

[Dean Smith]

Sounds like you have already found the Oasis we all need with this poem. Thankyou for sharing it.
I enjoyed the read, helped me to step away from the city and my day to day grind.
Wonderful x

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I have written a poem like this before, I may revise it, reading this you inspired me. I agree with you. I want to escape this mundande life sometimes and go to a tropical island! just escape, the sun pouring down on me, inhaling exotic wild orchids and just relaxing. who woudln't want that???

[Peaches]

Can I come? I love the way you painted a picture with words.