Alone Again: Damn!

One day you said you loved me

More than everyone else, combined!

I was happier than anyone could be

But it turns out I was so very blind

 

Suddenly your feelings toward me changed

The love disappeared, you didn’t care anymore

What happened to all the sweet words we exchanged

You forgot them all and headed out my door

 

It seems that love was never meant for me

It seems that no one can stand who I am

I’m not going to go around and plea

It just sucks that I’m alone again, damn!

 

Reviews

[Bear]

I've had these thoughts, suffered from similar emotions... just have to find a way to continue on in hopes that one day love will cross one's path again and that the love might flame from within once again, burning slowly so, that it remains a long, very long time.

Fine write, thanks for sharing.
Bear

[Brie]

Great! The rhyming seemed so natural and believable. I like the bit of humor as well. Nicely done!
-Brie

[Sandra K]

We have alot in common.
LOL


Sandra K!

[Michael]

I'm tired as hell (to quote you) pretty too ;)


Yeah, i know, i feel very much this way myself, not to sound like a sexist jerk but i've never met a woman who can accept the inside part of me. I have OCD, once you have a label you're kinda screwed. just my opinion anyway. (HUGS) hang in there

[None]

I read this and see hope. When I look back and think of someone as being "the one" I find later that after the initial shock--they weren't the one after all. There's someone perfect for you, it's just a matter of time.
It's great to have that love feeling you describe in verse one, but for some people it's all talk.
Consider yourself lucky, you are too special a person to ever think it's you. Love will find you but you have to believe it will occur for the magic to happen. Be good to yourself! Excellent feelings and emotions here! You have me writing a book. haha.

[Ashes of Apathy]

This is sad. I has a nice flow. You may want to expand on your vocabulary to pull the reader in more with vivid description. Keep on writen!
-jr