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Everytime I see you my mind begs

begs to have you, I love your beautiful long legs,

your wavy brown hair

I really can't help but to stare

When i see you, you leave me hyptnotized

people around us can see how much im mezmerized

You don't know how much I want you

cause you creep into everything i do

so what have you got to say?

please tell me you'll stay

okay let me be clear and say what this is about

do you think its possible that we could go out?

Reviews

[The High Poet]

Interesting write. I did enjoy reading it, thanks for sharing... keep them coming]

Awww, the ending is sweet. I see the narrator as nervous or sly. I would add more detail, though. The writing seems to be a bit bland.
Good job. :)

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Whoow.. I love this.. this is so unique... what a great way to ask someone out that you care about!!! This is super special and would certainly melt most girl's hearts!!! Love the way the feeling flow straight from your heart! thank you for sharing! =)