War's chant

Heart beats wildly with emotion

Fingers clench with fear of what is to come

Dreams and reality have come to duel

Sightless eyes gaze forward

Outcome seemingly clear

For my bet has fallen 

 My precious dreams are crumbling

Stomach twists and turns 

A game never ceased

Out of control

Life led from the darkness

Light just now shining

Lost

 Sanity here is tested

Limits of one's endurance

The time has come to prepare

Smoke rises in the air

Stench so vile

Death

EVERYWHERE

 The army of our enemy

Rushing forward

To their deaths

We stand still in the silence of the night

Cool wind blowing gently

Trembling hands do tighten

Strong we may stand 

Yet we are the same

Both going to battle

A game never truly won

Here i stand 

watching their deaths

and mine 

Reviews

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

Dreams and reality have come to duel
watching their deaths

and mine


This is one of my favorite poems so far. You are such a good writer!!!! To capture the intensity of the fear during a victory. No one is without pain not the victim nor the victor. You are so amazing. I love to read your writings and look forward to many many more.

[The Empty Hour Glass]

You've captured the concept of war quite well, in my opinion. I liked how you emphasized Death's part in the battle. Overall, I'd say you've done a good job.

[L. Edward Neale]

Indeed a game never truly won. Wise words. I agree! In war there are no winners. Speaks powerfully of courage in the face of despair and futility. Fantastic. Thanks for sharing!

[MOON]

Vividly written and captured.

[afra]

wowoow ....amazing

[EternityWolf101]

Very powerful poem. I agree with one of the last lines, "A game never truly won." It just... feels right. Great poem.

[Brittany]

Oooo....this is some great stuff. Gave me chills. Great word choices and imagery.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful language led me in the emotion and the fear in your words. No war is any good. No-one will win and pain is permanent. A strong ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Emrys Realmskip]

Woah! this is GREAT!

[Zombie Waffle]

Very well written, and at times very vivid. You lost my attention a little in the middle, but the last stanza had me hooked again.