hate you ?

the complications of being in love with someone who gives you mixed signals

i've decided i'm not going to try to hate you.

why would i, really?

why would

                         i hate you?

 

why would

                         i try to hate you?

why wouldn't

                         i love you

the way 

                         you want me to love you?

i just

can't.

i can't 

cause you still feel like the thorn of a rose

and i've always loved showing off my scars;

cause you are the darkest of the nights

and i've always loved looking at the stars;

cause you make me feel like I'm drowning

but i've always loved the rain;

cause you're the blade of a dagger

and i've always loved the pain.

Author's Note

as always, i'd love to know what you think of this :)

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

First and immediate: the way your have placed your phrases seems to suggest emotions oscillating.. as if negatives versus positives. Your phrasing comes and goes, repeats itself, thoughts flying, heart denying truth because of doubt, maybe? This is romance in all honesty, emotive and all

[fen]

thank you so much for your words, Emma. I see you get the message... your review is on point :)

[emmajoygreen]

Will be calling again as soon as can, promise. :)

[Matthew Kult]

The thin line between love and hate. Between being a saint and the devil. Didn't think I would like the structure but I do. It works well for this poem. Lovely write.

Great read.

With love

Matthew

[fen]

thanks for your words, Matthew. i was just experimenting with the structure and came up with this, which i surprinsingly like too. i'm glad you enjoyed the reading :)

[living lavender]

i loved this piece dearly. these lines were my favorite:
"cause you are the darkest of the nights
and i've always loved looking at the stars;"

the inward fight portrayed. stunning.
{heart gripping. thought arousing.}

[fen]

you're words mean a lot to me, thank you! i am so happy that you liked my poem :)

[Abigail]

Beautiful writing. The bitter sweet love

[light and ashes]

Good writing.
Loved the salty mixture here.

[Arundass TP]

Nice poem. Love v/s Hate conflict.