Reflection

Who is that in the mirror?

REFLECTION

Crow's curls cascading to hide the monster

And exhibit expired beauty

Eyes of coal watching all

Turning endlessly and still unburnt

The corners of her trembling lips turn

In the direction where the shadows will illuminate the sun

Time and patience are her enemies when she starts run

As her legs of majesty are reduced to instruments of movement

Wishes of an unbreakable silver armor to disappear the

Soreness of her decapitated temple writhes in her mind

Her face is torn into bits and pieces of parchment,

With her watery signature to equilibrate her convex alignment

Her fingers scratch the facade of hypocrisy

The mask of happiness lies in ashes to the bag of secrets

Numbers mismatch her from the standards of the world

As she stands among a deplorable army of black doves

Never ending weight kills her under a back full of disgrace

A heart that will forever hold together the most beautiful

Doll the clowns will ever know

In the glass of growing pain, her most precious possession

Is nothing more than a silent torture

As she cries to me, to her reflection

Author's Note

If you read this, please leave a review. Good or bad, doesn't matter to me. Just let me know what you think.
Thank you to Sylvia Plath for the inspiration.

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Sylvia Plath has always been a favorite poet of mine. I think you have captured her use of mystery, darkness, the macabre and tragedy in this piece. And what a tragedy we have here.. a young, obviously beautiful woman, yet a darkling, cannot see any sense of beauty in her reflection. Your use of language in this piece reveals what she does see instead.. your metaphoric language is brilliantly done. I am very pleased with this piece and enjoyed reading it very much. Thank you for the journey.

[Euro]

I am very happy that you enjoyed my poem, Lori! I'm glad that you saw what I was talking about. It's sad that this happens to many girls, though. So many beautiful woman who degrade their beauty.
Thanks for reading and liking!

[Ravyne Hawke]

It really is sad, Penelope, but what I find encouraging is poets like you who give voices to these girls who see themselves as less than what they truly are. You are a heroine in my book -smiles-

[Euro]

Aww, thanks for that nice comment. I'm glad that you say that. Actually, I used to be like the girl I talk about in the poem and well, right now I don't feel so bad about myself but scars of how I used to think before are still there.
Nevertheless, I am someone that cares much of self-esteem and I don't like it when truly beautiful girls, if only physically, see themselves as ugly.

[Ravyne Hawke]

I think there is beauty in everyone.. physically, emotionally, spiritually... and when one's self-esteem is low, it is hard to let that beauty shine through. It is wonderful that you've made it somewhat of a mission to help others with their self-esteem, even if it is through your poetry. If more cared, this epidemic would diminish.

[Euro]

Oh, yes...that's true. I do believe that girls can be told that they are beautiful no matter what but you the media will always make sure to corrupt that beauty with the prototype of women they exhibit. I really hate them doing that.

[chandlerl]

I had to read this several times to figure out all the lines, which is great because that means there's deeper meaning that takes time to figure out, you sure created a splinter for the mind. The first two lines hooked me in. I love this poem, it felt as if I was reading a published piece. beggining to end, it was very well written, the imagery, the thought put into it, the ending...it's a really well put together piece.
Thank you.

[de_maruf]

nice

[Neha Godambe]

I was attuned to the persona created in this piece full of strong imagery. Great work!

[Euro]

Thanks for your nice review!

[KeeD]

I really enjoyed this P, great imagery and well penned.

[Euro]

Thanks!

[Erinne S.]

I liked this one Penelope! Your descriptions were really great :)

[Euro]

Thank you for reading and liking.

[rnuff]

I really enjoyed this write, Wonderful imagery and descriptiveness.
One of my faves so far today I have read. amazing!

[Euro]

I'm glad that you liked this very much, Kim.

[David Scott]

A very well expressed cry... We need to cry out.
I think this write shows poetic growth for you.

[Euro]

Thank you for the nice review :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I had to study Sylvia Plath poetry in College. I never like her desire to dance with death. Her life was sad and interesting. The poem felt like a secret. I like the feel of mystery and fear. You create many good visions with the poem.
"Her face is torn into bits and pieces of parchment,
With her watery signature to equilibrate her convex alignment
Her fingers scratch the facade of hypocrisy"
I enjoyed this poem. I wish I could write with skill. Mystery and fear. You can. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Euro]

I'm glad that you enjoyed this poem! Thanks for your review.

[Melody Telleria]

This is one of your best, I enjoy seeing your use of words and how you weave them together in this piece, there is a lot of thought and synergy. Its a strong poem with such beautiful imagery. I was quite captivated.

[Euro]

Why, thank you! Glad you liked the poem.