Benny

Benny

A Poem by 49k_jdys
"

If you know Benny, you know.

"

Benny,

 

Isn’t it funny

a paradox

a paradox

a paradox

What does that word mean again

What doesn’t it mean

the clouds

the clouds

the clouds

They’re ovular and blue

and a pile of them fit in your palm

and slide down your throat

so easily

with a little chaser of

whatever was left in the fridge

And then the clouds

the clouds

the clouds

Or is it rain

Or is it thunder,

that rumbling,

rumble 

rumble

rumble

in my chest

I thought it was my heart

beating

But when will it stop?

© 2021 49k_jdys


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"If you know Benny, you know." That was my first clue the rest came from your tags and it still took me days to register that "Benny" was not a person like Jack or Mr. Goodman , the only "bennys" I have a cultural reference for.
The first hurdle I had was therefore accessibility, the poem was Greek to me. A Google search has corrected that, but it may be a problem for this poem in general. Note: thanks to your poem I have come to realize Elton Johns' song isn't about an actual person named Benny.
Once in the informational loop I can see the general meaning and arc of the poem. Taken in this light it is well done and thank you for sharing.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

49k_jdys

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the review. It's not my finest work, and definitely angsty. I haven't completed a piece o.. read more
Delmar Cooper

3 Years Ago

I wrote a poem that got published and a reviewer compared it to William Carlos Williams' work. I ha.. read more
49k_jdys

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Mr. Cooper, it means quite a lot.



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"If you know Benny, you know." That was my first clue the rest came from your tags and it still took me days to register that "Benny" was not a person like Jack or Mr. Goodman , the only "bennys" I have a cultural reference for.
The first hurdle I had was therefore accessibility, the poem was Greek to me. A Google search has corrected that, but it may be a problem for this poem in general. Note: thanks to your poem I have come to realize Elton Johns' song isn't about an actual person named Benny.
Once in the informational loop I can see the general meaning and arc of the poem. Taken in this light it is well done and thank you for sharing.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

49k_jdys

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the review. It's not my finest work, and definitely angsty. I haven't completed a piece o.. read more
Delmar Cooper

3 Years Ago

I wrote a poem that got published and a reviewer compared it to William Carlos Williams' work. I ha.. read more
49k_jdys

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Mr. Cooper, it means quite a lot.

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Added on November 1, 2021
Last Updated on November 1, 2021
Tags: depression, anxiety, escape, addiction

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49k_jdys
49k_jdys

Grand Rapids, MI



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