Danse Macabre

I once, a dance with a skeleton, was invited.

His toothy grin and black eyed charm

did entice me into a timeless stance.

We whirled in time with opiate music.

Our elegant bodies travelling the darkness

leading me on to a spectral sight.

Out feet did stride 'cross purgatory souls

who's putrefied, jealous limbs did claw

to clasp and scratch our dancing bones.

We waltzed in time midst the demons ball

where masked grotesques perversely stared 

and mocked my pirouetting momenti mori.

Our enervated promenade at last slowly waning

he clasped me in his osseous arms

and whispered deeply 'Now, my lovely'.

Seducing with a benevolent, arcane smile,

he laid me down in my sweet, satin grave.

No grieving sighs, no one weeps.

Sanguine

Mute

Departed.

I once, a dance with a skeleton, was invited.

His toothy grin and black eyed charm

did entice me into a timeless stance.

Author's Note

This is a poem that I started to write in 2013. I have recently been reworking it and it is much better then it was, however I still feel that it needs a bit of work with the flow and rhythm.

Reviews

[Jane Dougherty]

Strange, eerie poem. I like it. I think if you want to create a more flowing rhythm you just need to cut out a few words here and there, like
did entice me into a timeless dance.

would become
enticed me into a timeless dance.

and
Our enervated promenade at last slowly waning

would become
Our enervated promenade slowly waning

One thing that didn't seem to make complete grammatical sense to me was the first line. The third line also seems to say more or less the same thing. Maybe rework the first line since it's such an important one.