Faded smiles

Love or The lack there of

Faded smiles

Smiles has been faded
Our light has been shaded
Quality time is no longer
appreciated
Lonely Nights are no longer hated, but anticipated.


What is this emptiness we feel? Why is there loneliness?
Who created this resentfulness between us? 
What's all the fuss about not feeling loved if we have already given up?


If we're  unwilling to try due to the lack of trust
Why anticipate the wait to separate what has been shared between us for years?


Tired of shedding tears that never turned into smiles
Tired of taking these steps towards trust that feels like miles
Miles traveled over and over again just to finally realize we were only meant to be friends


Well we crossed that line states ago
Traveling through the same cities pacing slow
Steady searching for proof that love existed between my silent halls and your distant calls


Praying that love would find its way and knock down these brick walls that shielded my heart from many troubled storms
Storms that were meant for harm
Storms that was unknown to the norm.


I must untravel this road that somehow lead to a wrong turn
And forced me to bump into you
To be intrigued by your charm


But the heart wasn't ready for the twist and turns of getting acquainted with someone  whose love was far beyond tainted


In the beginning I was captivated by your false hopes to love me and me only

A picture you painted too well
Well enough for me to recognize you for the selfish person you were
I've traveled far enough down this road to know that love never existed here



It was a desire of mines that lead to a river of tears
After so many miserable years
I'm glad to say that love never made its way here

Author's Note

self happiness and peace of mind first.

Reviews

[R.E. Ray]

This is an incredibly powerful piece. An ideal metaphor that you've sculpted with artistic hands. You certainly convey deep emotions, especially pain, resentment and bitterness -- but also strength and resilience.

For me, this poem would flow better if re-structured into lines. You have so many rich words and rhymes that seem to get lost in one paragraph. Still, it's an impressive piece.

[Quietstorm]

I know. I've gotten better. Lol thanks for reading and the advice

[Crosby Idasa]

This is a very nice poem from you, it touches the heart❤️ Every line read pushes you to the next. Interesting

[Quietstorm]

Thanks alot😊

[Chris Shaw]

A fine write. Where there is no trust, it can be difficult to find love. This piece is filled with strong emotions. It was quite painful to read. The effort that goes into a relationship, to find out after such a long period of time that it just isn't working is so hurtful. Selfishness is hugely destructive. Pleased to have found this poem

Chris

[Quietstorm]

Thanks for reading. This was a personal piece that I wrote years ago. Thanks for your review

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome. Pleased it is in the past and that your present is happier.

[Quietstorm]

Yes mam, the happiest I've ever been. Thank you

[Chris Shaw]

Great to hear :)

[Laconic Meraki]

Your words are loud and clear.
I can relate. I have been here.

Loved this , the way its written.
But hate that you had to bear that pain.
I pray it made you stronger and wiser. 💜
Never , Never go back to that toxic environment. You are important. You are #1.🙏🤞
Best Wishes ,
-c

[Quietstorm]

Thanks for reading and your kind words . And yes, once I left that toxic relationship, I realized how strong I really am. Yes mam, self comes before anything else

[Laconic Meraki]

I had to realize that too.
And it's taken me a while.
But time and change truly heals .
Keep writing love.

[Quietstorm]

Indeed , time heals all wounds☺️ thanks for your kind words.

[AC Sipe]

I love the raw emotion in this piece.

[Quietstorm]

Thanks for reading

[Ranger Kessel]

Great metaphor. Great writing. Great piece. Can't ask for more. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed this piece a lot

[Quietstorm]

Thanks for reading

[Zoya]

Wow, there's so much in this! This has evoked so many emotions that it is hard to describe how I feel. How people get fed up of their love life and all they want to do is go back on the road so travelled and make everything right.
Wonderful work!

[Quietstorm]

Yes this piece here was very personal, so many emotions, but now ancient history. Thanks for reading

[BlackPrince]

Smiles have been faded, our light shaded;
quality time is no longer appreciated,
lonely nights no longer hated but anticipated.

What is this loneliness we feel?
Why is there loneliness?
Who created this resentfulness between us?

I like your poem. It's wonderfully written with much emotion and heartfelt truth.

But it seems you compacted everything together
and it looks like a normal prose. It needs space.
As a reader and a fellow poet, my advice to you is that you should separate your poems into stanzas (paragraphs) so that the readers would digest the information easily, take stock, feel the rhythm and grasp the core message of your poem.
I'm speaking with good intentions as a fellow writer.

WELL DONE

[Quietstorm]

I know , wasn't thoughtfully inputted. Thanks for advice 🤗

[Taino]

So much deep, sincere emotion expressed so beautifully. Love, true love so longed for, it’s absence leaves a void within us. A quest so frought with pain that at times it’s better to avoid than seek. So profound with such imagery, please keep writing.

[Quietstorm]

Thanks for reading and I will