Minor In The Mix

The minor we see today,

Is the minor we see later,

He is either a tough guy,

Or just wants to get by,

She might want to party,

Or just want to be free,

Off all the wants needs,

Maybe he is just a boy,

Confused on what toy,

To use,

And please,

Maybe she wants to love,

From the high skies above,

Maybe he wants to believe,

And let the other girl see,

She is worthy,

He is a golden trophy,

They will one day meet,

In the mix of the beating beat,

In the mix of minor though,

They are two different bows. 

Reviews

[Ryan Henderson]

I like this poem. It had very good flow, good word choice and awesome rhyming scheme. As Yoda once said: "The force is strong with this one." In this case, the force of writing is concerned, not that of the energy around us. Very good work! (I would appreciate it if you returned the courtesy of the review)

[The Black Warrior]

I really like this poem, you capture my attention, from the beginning to the end.

WEll done!

[Belle]

I love the idea of "minor" - it links so well with the rhythm of the poem. Beautiful musical imagery! My only suggestion might be to say something other than "beating" beat - pulsing beat, perhaps? Throbbing beat? But maybe the repetition was intended; if so, sorry! I think your final line is just perfect, it's a really nice conclusion. I like the idea that they're two different "bows" - i.e. individuals - who'll try to play the same (metaphorical) instrument. An interesting twist on boy meets girl!

[DarkestStoryline]

This is pretty nice, I loved the imagery it created in my mind.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Nice read,, I enjoyed your narrative expression, and your word choice is apt, good job
thankyou