Dream

on my eyes i have spectacles,
my dreams,
i have to see them, crystal clear,
no more fear,
i just cheer,
if they come out of my eyes,
must be happy tears,
was just a kid,
had a dream,
now its done,
realised my limits,
are imaginary,
all dreams are valid,
all dreams are valued,
all dreams are useless,
if you dont put in work,
i am worthless,
without a dream,
they say,
its impossible,
i say,
if your dreams,
dont seem impossible,
you are not dreaming big enough,
ill only go to sleep,
when my dreams are accomplished ,
ill put a smile on my face,
every moment i live,
every soul,
in my path,
i only touch them ,
with love,

Author's Note

feedback would be appreciated

Reviews

[Angelia]

Over all I like this poem. I cant figure out how the last few lines tie into it though. Which is a bummer, I always look for a lot of substance at the conclusion. You seemed to say a lot about yourself in this poem, it's very expressive. Good work.

[3X3MPLER]

thank you for stopping by

[Einstein Noodle]

have to agree with viola ..i think you can be more precise in the use of punctuation .. i like the theme .. i like the life span references ... big difference between youth and maturity .. your poem covers a lot of ground including the hint of spirituality in your closing ... i think you can find more refreshing rhymes and some minor editing may help your point of view .. i.e.
"if your dreams,
dont seem impossible"
the double negative means that a person doesn't think their dreams are impossible .. hence .. possible ;)
E.

[Kimberly Navarro]

nice! I once heard: if your dreams don't scare you, they aren't big enough. And this poem embodies that saying about dreaming big and not limiting yourself! yes, practice that too! I want to marry a phenomenal man to compliment me, a phenomenal woman! hahaha just sharing my truth
be blessed

[3X3MPLER]

thank you very much.You will find that man my dear :)

[bhavya]

Dreams seem impossible to be accomplished at Times ,yet we dream, and Deep within we want to live the dream before we die .. Beautifully written

[viola]

I like how you connect concepts in this poem, and you only realize what one line means after you read the one after it. For example "realized my limits" from the lines before sounds like, oh I grew up and realized that dream was silly, but then with the next line "are imaginary" suddenly the whole meaning is turned on it's head. Same with "all dreams are useless"--oh sad--but then "if you don't put in work"--ah ha! positive again. Then you connect from useless dreams to you are worthless if you don't have a dream. Cool!
If you want to make it even better, I think you can look at your punctuation and formatting. Right now, it's just one long poem. I like the break-up of lines, but which lines are most important? Can you separate them with a period? Or do you want any lines to flow right into the next? Get rid of the comma. A sudden switch in thought? Try a dash. If it's a really big break, you could do a stanza. Just a few thoughts. Take them or leave them!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Dreams are said to be the realm of our subconscious, where our soul can speak to us and demonstrate for us the possibilities and the potentiality!

A captivating, motivating poem!

[3X3MPLER]

thank you Jyoti

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[annalysiar]

Beautifully written. Hope driving. Dream inspiring.

[Shei]

Inspiring words, well done. Dreams are worthless if you don't put them to work but some dreams are just for fun :-)

[3X3MPLER]

thank you for taking your time to review this

[A.marie.speaks]

"If your dreams don't seem impossible, you aren't dreaming big enough" great lines! This poem motivated me, thank you. We are worthless without dreams and the drive to achieve them!

[alifeacoustic]

We read about impossible scenarios playing out daily in our newspapers, where people achieve the most unbelievable feats against all the odds. Evan a trillion to one chance of something happening means in all probability it will eventually happen.
Keep dreaming big, we make our own limits in life, and we can also break through them too.
Great positive write. Thank you for sharing.