the now, the then

a senryu

 

it made the now sweet.

i delighted in the now

and you.  that is past.

Reviews

[Karen]

Oooh... quite a punch in the gut this poem! Haha! I love how you managed to use senryu to express your emotions. I especially like how you were not afraid to divide the last line with a period. That is brazen and it works excellent in this poem!

[annie lee]

Thank you, Karen, for your review and the emailed suggestion. I try to at least thank reviewers, but right now I have almost 60 read requests. I also give what I hope are comprehensive reviews, but I am quickly losing the time to spend on my own writing. I do not want to ignore anyone, and I am not attempting to become a celebrated darling of WC. But when somebody has requested a review and see that the poem or chapter or story have 125+ views and 35 reviews, I wonder "so what do they want me for?" -- is it just a statistical competition? I didn't to mean to complain; I do not send out reader requests often because it makes me feel uncomfortable. But half the people I have "friended" do not even accept read requests. I really appreciate your candor and attention. Thanks so much.

[DrD]

If I knew then what I know now, I wouldn't know you. I kinda' think that's what this poem is all about and it may be sparse in words but heavy in innuendo. I enjoyed it very much.

[annie lee]

Thank you for your review. I cannot write the explicit adult poems full of pulsating passion that I see others do so well. So this is probably as close as I'll ever get to it. haha. But I like the discipline of these short forms because they can say a lot AND leave a lot to the imagination.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

in comparison...i am much happier now since you...because of you, but after you.

love it.

[annie lee]

ahh, but a different mood...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, definitely.

[Sami Khalil]

Power of your words are evident...:>)......................

[annie lee]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome ...:>)