ashes, ashes -- we all fall down

Humanity's mark on the landscape.

 

we are reduced to

 pitiful little heaps of

clothes  --  boarded-up

storefronts  --  gutters littered with

shiny beer cans and sleeping

drunks  --  newspapers,

unread, blowing page by page

across carefully

tended city squares  --  stinking

dumpsters  --  acres of wrecked cars

arranged like rows of

bleached skulls in the relentless

sun:   dying and dead,

rusting and rotted  --  the world

decays in our very hands.

tears cannot save us  --

and our prayers fall back to

earth.  we damn each

other and this fragile place.

    see -- we spoil the scenery

Reviews

[Frieda P]

This is amazing minnichinz, the imagery here is spot on, or should I say garbage on, I've a very vivid picture in my mind, and it ain't one bit pretty, but that's where you were headed with this smack you over the head social commentary in your poem....good message here, tears were a great touch, if we even have enough time left to save our planet....

[Glen Yumang Manese]

This is an eye opener of a write...quite different from the first one I read of yours...I usually start at the back of a writer's work to get a better feel of their words...I'm glad I did not miss this one...I liked how you put this into perspective in the end lines:

and our prayers fall back to
earth. we damn each
other and this fragile place.
see -- we spoil the scenery

yet the whole narrative gives much to think about as a reader...

[annie lee]

Thank you.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...you can come out of this verse a few times and find meaning each time...

[Pryde Foltz]

I like the progression from period to dash. Which leaves me wondering on the one single solitary period. Are you saying there is no GOD. Makes sense; because then it is up to us. Clever and poignant write, my friend.

Sorry there are few others but this one stands out in its existence.

[Sami Khalil]

"dying and dead,

rusting and rotted -- the world

decays in our very hands.

tears cannot save us --

and our prayers fall back to

earth. we damn each

other and this fragile place.

see -- we spoil the scenery"
You words echo in truth and the reality of the human condition. Very straightforward and insightful...:)