the door to a new world

new beginnings

im running to the door.us its about to close. the door to the way out. out of this cruel world. as i turn the knob. i pray to god that this life is better then the one iv'e got. i question myself should i have stayed and fought. no! stop. i say to myself. and i step into the world iv'e sought.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh, I love the idea of this poem! There's two different perspectives that I caught from this poem of yours. 1) The door to a "new world" can mean going to Heaven. Since Heaven is a whole different world and it's so beautiful and wonderful. It's what most human's heart and soul desires. 2) A second chance at life that God has given you to succeed with. Sometimes if we're willing to prove to God that'll give our best shot if we had gotten a second chance, he gives it to us. We have to work ourselves into his approval for that though.

-The only thing about this is it could be formed a little bit more formal. For example: by using commas, complete sentences, and capitalization. You done a great job, regardless! :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;)

[Empty Spaces]

im very thankfull that one. you read this and two. you accually ment what u said once again thank u

[ObscurityNone]

You seem to have yourself a natural ability, take hold of it and improve upon it. This was good, I can see you doing so much better in the future.

[Empty Spaces]

your have a very respectable opinion

[C.C. Marx]

It makes you think the only thing I'm slightly uneasy about is the lack of stanza-like structure, but that's my opinion nice job

[Empty Spaces]

thanks

[C.C. Marx]

Your welcome :)