Suicide

My heart beats, but not for long.

My last breath, I'm almost gone.

The last pill still in my hand.

The last tear that I couldn't stand.

The pain was almost over,

My heart was almost done.

All that I had fought for,

My battle wasn't won.

But at least it was over.

I guess I am weak.

Nothing left to stop me,

As my heart stops the beats.

Goodbyes to my family,

And goodbyes to "the one"

Goodbye, the battle is finally done.

Reviews

[Frieda P]

I really have no words, this one cuts like a knife, I lost my beloved sister to suicide. There's always another battle to be won....

[1Disawsum]

I hope the wounds have healed as much as they can, I love my twin sister to anorexia... There is, but only for the people willing to see it in that light. If you lose one battle, we must know that that isn't the end of the world. As you said, there is always another battle to be won. I lost a battle, fighting with my sister's death, and I almost lost many battles, fighting my own death, but I realise there is always another battle to be won, like you said. Thankyou fo commenting!

[Frieda P]

Sorry for your loss, it can be overwhelming, stay strong, and you're very welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

Old saying. Dead people leave no tales. I lost two brothers to suicide. Suicide is the easy route. The hard route is going forward and telling the world to f-off. I lived in 11 foster homes and joined the Army at 16 years old. I try to test death. I suicide boarded the many oceans and try to free climb any mountain I got near. No easy life for anyone. The people with the least to lose. Have the most to gain. A powerful poem on a strong topic. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry. Made me think this early morning.
Coyote

[1Disawsum]

Very true. I'm sorry for your loss, hope the wounds have healed, as imperfect as they can seem to be. Yes, suicide is the easy way out. There are always other solutions, but some cannot see them, or see the point of moving forward. I hope you found the 'right' foster home? Very tough life you've lived indeed. Powerful saying, "The people with the least to lose, have the most to gain.'
Thankyou for your review, glad this stimulated your brain a little early in the morning!

[Coyote Poetry]

The most dangerous people are the one's who want and need something and won't stop till they have it. People born with everything. Don't appreciate anything.

[captain]

sad & tragic...

I felt the hopelessness of the speaker of this poem. The dark endings of her/his life, as if nothing matters anymore. In times like this, a friend is all he/she needed that will remind him/her that its okay to be heartbroken.

I hope your doing good my friend, that this poem is just an inspiration from your dark road, perhaps.
I like the rhyme and metter of this piece, very nice & very well expressed!

[1Disawsum]

yes, this is a sad and tragic poem, isn't it? And what's even more sad, is that this isn't from my imagination. This is true, this happens in the world so many times every day, yet nobody recognises them anymore in the media, as it is plagued by fashion etc. Not even news think this is worthy as it has happened so many times. Yet, do we really just... forget them? No, we remember them, but media thinks otherwise.
I'm fine at the moment, but if only what you said was true, that this poem is an inspiration from my reading and has influenced my writing... if only. But no, this is true, and I have had many suicide attempts. Let's just say, this is my last hope. Expressing myself through my poems. A feeling from deep inside my heart, let out on ink, relieving myself from the tension building up inside!
Thanks for the review, very helpful! If I can, I'll try to make some more poems with a rhyming pattern. Thanks again! :)

[captain]

please do not harm yourself anymore, you know your not alone despite the feeling you or I always felt - the feeling of being so alone in this world... what I always remember upon myself is that I still have my family who loves me, I don't want to leave them just yet or I don't want to leave this earth with many unfinished bussiness... Don't forget to dream, to keep wishing, I know despite the dark road there will always be light in the end...

YOu know my friend, I am sadden, that this is losely based upon yourself. You know when I think of a line or saying : "there gotta be more to life" I felt a slight sting in my heart, it made me felt it is true. Yeah, I have some anxiety, and I do try to overcome them, its still there but i am hoping that it will completely be gone or just be done with it - like the past is in the past... Keep expressing your thoughts, poetry always have its catharsis effect on us. Be well my friend...

[1Disawsum]

The difference between you and I is that you have family, your birth mum and dad. Who do I have? A foster parent, and my biological parents in jail. And although my dad is a counsellor and my science teacher, I can't express the words I want to say, how I feel. No words are ever strong enough for anybody to truly understand the extent of my pain. (hey great line for a new poem! ;) ) What unfinished business do I have? Nothing! Thanks for trying to cheer me up aha maybe I'll read and review some of your poems to keep me busy! :)

[captain]

I heard about this song by Kari Kimmel - "Where You Belong". The lyrics says: It's not where you come from. It's where you belong. With that said, if your foster parents loves you much, takes care of you, love you like their own, then it will be enough, right? but then again as I heard over the news and some friends who are came from foster care to foster care, it is not easy to find a good parents that will truly loved you, but it is possible.

I wish you well my friend... and if you don't have any unfinished business, then create one ;)
always glad to help a friend.

[1Disawsum]

hmm... I should listen to your advice more often! aha I never thought of it that way, I always treated my foster dad as a counsellor, less of a real dad. He is a great dad though, all that's left for me is to treat him like a dad!

Thanks! You're AMAZING. And wonderful. And clever. And the list goes on and on. :D

[captain]

creating a positive outlook in life is not easy, but it doesn't mean we can't , we definitely can survive this. BE well and you are very welcome. :)

[1Disawsum]

yes, thankyou! You too!