Fear

Fear

A Poem by Amit

Somewhere in the dark
those eyes are staring me
My eyes getting smaller
those eyes are increasing
My loud cry dying in me
My helpless heart pounding louder
Rainfall and thunderclap
Trembling leg and hand
Those eyes are red and scary
Slowly coming towards me
Two hands raised towards me
Suddenly water splashed on my face
It is already morning
I am late

© 2018 Amit


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Excellent poem. Very vivid description of a nightmare, and the imagery grows slowly more unsettling as it progresses.

Keep up the great work!

-Derekv


Posted 6 Years Ago


Amit

6 Years Ago

Thanks for your review...
I love how the mind is playing with you here, and reality steps in at the last minute. The only thing that doesn't quite fit is the 'slowing coming towards me', should probably be 'slowly coming towards me.

I like the dark undertones of this though. It speaks of a slight paranoia to me.

Nice movement!
Nice

Posted 6 Years Ago


Amit

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your review I just got the mistake I have done, thanks again for that.

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Added on July 25, 2018
Last Updated on July 26, 2018
Tags: horror, morning, eye, poem, helpless, cry, dark, fear, dream, sleep, late

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Amit
Amit

Kendrapara, Odisha, India



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