You

I find myself with you in a dream
Walking on the beach with
Our hands held together
The gentle wind , the orange sky
Down the ocean , walking
Listening to the sea hymns.
You suddenly dissapear , leaving me alone
It's like I have no gravity to fall onto.
I wake up and find you
Sleeping , silently , on my left
Like there is nothing to fear
But my fear to lose you remains
My heart still longs to hold you and love you
even if you are unaware
But I know , one day we'll not be in the same bed
And we will forget 'Us' and move away .

Author's Note

If you have any suggestions or advice, please let me know. I would love to hear your thoughts.

Reviews

[Alpha Female]

I wish this was a little lengthier, because you twisted and turned this so many times, that I just experienced an emotional rollercoaster. Which is not a bad thing. A little more detail about the feelings or how losing "them" would make you feel, seems to me that it would do this poem some justice

[Vasudha Jhingan]

Thank you so much. I'll surely keep it in mind.

[Bhagyesh Dalmia]

It is really heart touching, I wait for your writings all the time, and get super excited seeing your post.

[Vasudha Jhingan]

Oh , thank you so much 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of emotions in the poetry. Just watch you flow and connect each line. Thank you for sharing your words and your poetry.
Coyote

[Vasudha Jhingan]

Thank you .

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Tony Jordan]

I think this started off well then lost it's way slightly then regained the thread/theme.
The feeling of fear of loss is well conveyed though.

[Vasudha Jhingan]

Thank you .😊 I will surely keep your advice in mind .

[Tony Jordan]

And I will keep an eye on your work. See how you progress Vasudha ;)

[Nirupama]

Deep, imploring. Very good. Stirring

[Vasudha Jhingan]

Thank you ☺️☺️

[FreedomFighter]

A reminder that love is a powerful emotion almost dreamlike, great work here

[Vasudha Jhingan]

Thank you so much 😊

[Rayyan Anwar]

A beautiful poem by a beautiful heart

[Vasudha Jhingan]

Thank you 😊😊

[Rayyan Anwar]

Pleasure is mine

[Isabella Ivy]

I felt this piece was honest and uncomplicated. What sweet desires, what tragic happenstance in comparison. I enjoyed the relaxed feel of your words :) Thank you for the pleasant read. I.I.

[Vasudha Jhingan]

Oh , This really means a lot. Thank you so much . ☺️

[Isabella Ivy]

You are truly welcome! I.I.

[SkyVy]

Execelent poem and you did a really good job describing the writing it definitely put an image in my head when reading.

[Vasudha Jhingan]

Thank you 😊.