Perfection

For a short poem (5 lines or less) contest: http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/8149/

 I laughed in time to the music, 

you played on broken violin strings,

outside on the city streets,

and together,

we pretended that nothing was amiss. 

Author's Note

I'd still really appreciate any sort of a response, though. :)

Reviews

[Alicante lullaby]

I absolutely loved it.so short yet so influential.i have never seen that many emotions paste up such a little piece.

[Tapsi]

a lot in few...its a very rare quality and ure definitely the one with it.

It reminds me of how people act about the world and society today. Pretend nothing's wrong, even though we KNOW very well that something is terribly, terribly wrong. I like the city setting, because it seems like the city is a place with the most conflict, murders, trauma, millions of people of all different races living in the same area.

Short, but complex. Brilliant write.

[Snuggles McClintock]

i honestly think this is good. ta-dah

[Legion]

I am applauding. The togetherness of it all as well as the subtle madness. You pieced this together well. Hope you do note-worthy in the contest. Brillant.