Rain

Comparing him to the weather

Rain 

It started off soft

Peaceful and Quiet

But it got heavy

Loud like a Riot

 

Soft whispers,

Light Hugs

 

Sharp Shivers,

Harmful Drugs,

 

You were like the rain,

I knew it was coming,

I saw the storm clouds,

But never thought of running.

 

I thought it was just a sprinkle,

But it never passed,

It only got heavier,

And that’s when I asked

 

Do you still love me?

 

And The words I heard ,

Cracked like thunder

Echoing in my head

Making me wonder

 

Why didn’t I run

when I had the chance

I thought it was fun,

it was just a trance

i miss the lilac sky,

that once was

but that died 

long ago

Author's Note

Leave your thoughts :)

Reviews

[Heather]

Personally I love rain, something about it walking in it makes nothing else matter, in that moment everything is okay. As humans we crave thrills and don't think about risks, sometimes the idea of being completely happy, even for a moment, is supposedly worth it. I thoroughly enjoyed this!

[12.09am]

Thankyou so much !

[12.09am]

If you had some time to check out my short story " the call " , I'd really love some feedback on it :)

[Heather]

I'll get right on that :)

[AquaWater5674]

Very interesting..I had to read it twice...an analogy to so very many situations in life..
Cudos to You...
A poem for you..
IT..Rained..on my page, the deep blue ink ran together...the words..of my poem ..
No longer..readable..
But I knew..
What they said...
Because it was penned from the heart..
Beautifully, thoughtfully writen..
Debbie

[Midnight.Emotion]

Beautiful Poem. Love the concept, wish i could write as good as you. If you don't mind would love feedback on a poem I just wrote "Questions".

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem.
"i miss the lilac sky,
that once was
but that died
long ago"
The above lines were my favorite. I felt the longing and the memory. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Quinn W]

Me, personally, I've always enjoyed the rain but I understand what it is typically associated with in literature (sadness, despair, loneliness,etc.). I really loved your poem! It actually inspired me to write a poe if my about rain! Loved your poem so much! You are an incredible writer!

[Rachel]

Beautiful poem! You are a brilliant writer. I absolutely love this poem. The buildup was perfect. You have a way with words ;) "I miss the lilac sky," is probably my favorite line - so beautiful.

[12.09am]

Thank you so much for the kind words ! means alot :)

[Lyn Anderson]

A wonderful comparative analysis of what goes on in our heads and hearts as we are drawn to the storm.

[Sumo]

I love this, the continuity of events building up, mixed with the emotions that we all feel in our relationships.

[12.09am]

Really tired to portray the metaphor of nature and events in our relationships, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Elmarie]

Hi
This is your first poem I have read and I thoroughly enjoyed your visuals, use of language and your passion and came to the conclusion that you are a very talented poet. :)

Blessings

El

[12.09am]

Thankyou so much! really glad you enjoyed it :)

[12.09am]

If you had some time to check out my short story " the call " , I'd really love some feedback on it :)

[Papaya]

I love the double meaning of rain.
It is both sad and gloomy and a perfect backdrop for pain.
But it is also cleansing, washing away that pain.

[12.09am]

Thank you ! :)

[12.09am]

If you had some time to check out my short story " the call " , I'd really love some feedback on it :)

[Papaya]

I will try to read it but it's midnight here so possibly tomorrow. :)

[12.09am]

No worries ! haha it's only 2pm here

[Papaya]

Australia or New Zealand then I guess. :)