Gothic Angel

It’s her gravestone

It’s her lie

They think you become pure

When you die

But she knows the truth now

You don’t go

To a heaven or hell

You trapped to a chain

In your own little cage

Like the animal you are

Aren’t we all the same

She looks in the mirror

And all she sees is tears

Behind the makeup

She’s worn all these years

She is the gothic angel

Who sin was her pain

Loneliness

Was just game that she played

Now looking back

On the life that she lived

She wished she could get

One more chance

To live it again

She died how she lived

Cold, lost and alone

She wished she never

Would have ran away from home

Now she stands, at her gravesite

With this chain on her ankle

And a knife to her heart

Reviews

[Bee]

very dark but well done.

"Now she stands, at her grave site
With this chain on her ankle
And a knife to her heart"

I thought the imagery was awesome. The last part was my fave. Haunting. Great job.

[Sean M. Addams]

very dark and emotionally piece... like the detail in this alot...overall i thought you did great on this ..love the title too... nice work!!!

[Wolfwind Words]

I like this piece. It seems to infer that the negativity one feels is part of a self inflicted game. And if one where to be able to go back, they would simply not play it. I like how in the end, it takes us back to the idea of home being a foundation block for life, it aids in the lesson brought forth in this.

Great Ink!
Hugs!
Wolfie

[emmajoy]

Your poem is wonderful in a sad, dark way. How true this is, how life can make a person a half dead being purely by day to day attitude and a tragic inability to use every moment on earth.

You write with great style, measuring your words alongside your thoughts, ' She is the gothic angel ~ Who sin was her pain ~ Loneliness ~ Was just game that she played '

Not sure about 'She wished she never ~ Would have ran away from home'. seems out of tune with the traditional wording you've used in the rest of the poem.

Thank you for sharing.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When you live life denying your emotions dead you already are... this is really wonderfully dark in showing the harsher side of human nature.

[Brown Bull]

Hey my friend, I just saw your smiling face and thought I'd stop by. This is a very nicely done poem, nicely done indeed!

[r]

This is amazing! I forgot just how awesome you were, with not reviewing anything of yours for a while (sorry about that, btw, i really am) and WOW. This is so sad! Written stunningly, beautifully!! I love it!