What I believe

I believe in a place

Where we all must go

And the winds don’t blow

I believe in a place

Where sorrow has no name

And pain is a game

I believe in a place

Where everyone is happy

No one is alone

And everyone has somebody

No one will cry

Cause no one will die

And we will live forever in eternity

I believe

Yes I believe

That the place in the dreams

Is a reality

It has to be out there

A place where we are happy

It’s hard to believe

But I believe

What I believe

Is in peace

What I believe

Is in love

What I believe

Is what we all should believe

That one day, we well be

In the gardens of eve

Or heaven's gates above

@Ashley.M.E.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Some criticism first... This line "Where we all most go" you probably mean "must" instead of "most". If it's most... it should be "Where most of us go". Then in the line "No will cry" you forgot a "one" after "No". Also, in the last line "Or heavens gates above" there should be an apostrophe in "heaven's". For the most part, your poem has good expression in what you believe in. It was lacking in flow and rhythm for me. Those who are religious will probably relate though.

[Jamie S.]

Its refreshing to see someone so young be so spiritual and have such strong beliefs, nice writing girl, keep at it!

[r]

This poem was beautifully written and I love the repetition of "i believe". It really added to the rhythm of the poem, and it expresses what you believe really well. Good work.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was a good poem. I believe in that place. I believe that there will be a paradise on Earth. That's what I believe in. I think this was a good write. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Iota]

Believing is half the battle, the half is keeping your beliefs alive. This is a strong poem that was a nice read for today.

[nono]

seems kinda sad but i see your point...it's very nice i like it a lot

[the pup]

to believe the meanings of what u know and want to know can't be held by a pen not even typed out ur words as a gentle breeze touching the worlds time and longing for literature to care in the way u do is nourishing to others minds to have a taste so wish not to go on the pilgrimage so nicely done.

[zendikar]

You were able to pull off saying the same word a TON of times... very nice!

[Frantzuu]

A well written poem, awesome write!!

[Crowley]

Beautiful...nice sentiment good flow and well written. Nice job.