Man in the mask

They see his mask

But not himself

They hear his voice

But see no lips

He is a human

Yet he cannot reveal

For his face is hidden

By copper plated fears

He wants to be seen

But he’s always locked out

For he is different

 

He has a soul

It’s just hidden

For he is like any other man

He has sins

And has remorse

Though his face is unseen

 

He needs the key

To unlock his mask

It’s the only way

He will see

For don’t mistreat a person

For their face may never be seen

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Reviews

[Lucy Joan]

Interesting assessment of the masked man.
In the first and third lines, I'm not sure if it was what you intended, but I believe you meant "They.." instead of "The.."
They see his mask/ They hear his voice.
Also, in the second to the last sentence, miss treat is actually spelled mistreat.
Other than those minor grammatical slight, your poem was very intriguing. I love the imagery behind the masked man and his background. "He has a soul/ It's just hidden." Awesome description and diction! Great poem :D

[Coyote Poetry]

You create a very interesting poem. The mystery that lies behind a mask may surprise the person that may want to see. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Y.]

I love the imagery in it, and the whole message. Although, I have to agree with others, it's not as flowy as your other poems. :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I likes it
Great Job

[Wolfwind Words]

This speaks of how people will prejudge others, causing them to back into the shadows and no longer show their true selves.

This one flows kinda jerky buy you got the imagery through.

My suggestions...
Line 4 and 8 both end in "mouth" That's the first speedbump. If you can, try to use a different word that means the same thing...or alter one of the lines to describe the same image in a alternate way.
"For" it's a filler word that doesn't need to be in front of a line to keep it's meaning...(Me think's you're addicted to the word! lol)
"And has remorse" You could cut "Has" in that line and it will still work.
Line 6 - Option "Yet he cannot reveal" ?
Line 8 - Option "By copper plated fears" (This takes away the second use of the word mouth, yet keeps the color of the mask there in a more surealistic way.)

Overall I really liked the meaning and the lesson that this brings across!

Hugs!
Wolfie

[Emilia Kuemin]

This poem has very good thought to it, but I believe it is hard to understand. I think you should read through it and ask yourself, "does this wording make sense?" Of course as the author I do hope these words make sense to you. ^^" Over-all though I did get the jist of what you were saying.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very interesting... I like the use of the mask as someone who shuts themselves off from the a world that mistreats them... at least that is what I take from this piece.