Man in the mask

They see his mask

But not himself

They hear his voice

But see no lips

He is a human

Yet he cannot reveal

For his face is hidden

By copper plated fears

He wants to be seen

But he’s always locked out

For he is different

 

He has a soul

It’s just hidden

For he is like any other man

He has sins

And has remorse

Though his face is unseen

 

He needs the key

To unlock his mask

It’s the only way

He will see

For don’t mistreat a person

For their face may never be seen

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Reviews

[Lucy Joan]

Interesting assessment of the masked man.
In the first and third lines, I'm not sure if it was what you intended, but I believe you meant "They.." instead of "The.."
They see his mask/ They hear his voice.
Also, in the second to the last sentence, miss treat is actually spelled mistreat.
Other than those minor grammatical slight, your poem was very intriguing. I love the imagery behind the masked man and his background. "He has a soul/ It's just hidden." Awesome description and diction! Great poem :D

[r]

This imagery is amazing, and I love the...depth of the meanings. If that makes sense, hehe. ^^ Good work, as always. Love it.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Good job on this. It was really nicely written. I wish I had a mask most of the time because I don't need people to see everything that's wrong. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Nianque]

This poem is intense yet the lines are short. You have talent. I enjoy reading your works.

[Jamie S.]

Another great write, you have a nice touch with poetry. Thank you for sharing :)

[John O'Toole]

I love reading your poems, you have such strong meanings and explain them intensly with few words.

I love the meaning of this poem, it is true how more and more each day people are judged more on there looks and less on who they are.

Other than a few spelling mistakes, this poem is awesome.

[alesuriko]

I really, really liked this. So intensely descriptive and such a great piece on how humanity observes other people based on their looks. The addition of the hidden soul was very intriguing.

There are grammar problems that need attention, such as the "They" that are missing a "y" in the first and third lines. And in the second to last line you spelled "mistreat" wrong.

If you fix those minor errors, I suggest you submit this poem to my "Behind the Mask" contest because it's perfect for it.

[nyi]

funny though the first part i was reading it and i remember the movie 'The Man In The Iron Mask'..LOL..but this is really good write..i like this alot..my favorite one among yours...deceptive nature of human beings..anther big subject?

[the pup]

very good the way you described what there is what there is not like a mirror how to achieve and how to regain back his world i think your talent is become more well know congrats. =)

[Marie Harrison]

What a wonderful underlying message in this brilliant poem. Fabulous imagery throughtout the lines. Enjoyed this beautifully written piece.