The green eye

The evil eye

I see it

It hunts my soul

It wants my life

I will not let it take me

For I try not to look

In that giant green eye

For it wants my time

But I want to make it

For why do you hunt

My beast with in

Why are you so ugly

Can’t we be friends

For aren’t you apart of me

The part that I don’t want to see

To the eye I see when I look at myself

It this very beast

I will never be

By why doesn’t it keep pulling on me

Does it truly want my tainted heart

@All rights reseved by Ashley.M.E.

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

Great poem about that ugly green monster we all avoid. Thanks for sharing.

[Mauricio Montoya]

great job, well done

[TadKent]

I understand the concept of the poem, but I have to admit, it's a little hard to follow. The first few lines are great and easy to tag a long with, but once i got to line eight, I got a little bit confused. It once your time? Not sure what that meant, maybe a typo? After a few lines it's kind of reined back in and it becomes nice and tight again, but think about maybe tightening up the middle.

[nyi]

nice poem..really portray the situation..with simple words..and shorts..so i'd like to say succinct and effective

[alesuriko]

First I want to point out that "within" is one word. Interesting piece though, the flow could use some work and the imagery a little lacking in this piece. It doesn't feel very striking. It has the potential to be a dark piece and I like the concept, it just appears to be lacking the expression or displayed emotions that make it a haunting piece.

[chaotic katie]

great emotion i loved it keep writing

[Lucy Joan]

Awesome imagery here. The dark concept that you were able to express and the cynicism that the narrator finds in his/herself was wonderfully written.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was good. I loved it. I can imagine. Just like when I have anger rises up inside of me. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

wow. What a trip. Your images haunt me.