Rhyme Crime

A free verse is a rhyme crime

It loves to mess me up

On poetry tests my answers

Are wrong

When it comes to verse and text

Its meter or pattern

Don’t even exist

But it can have rhyme

Or can’t

Depending on its content

But I can rhyme

As this poem has shown

Oh wait…

Never mind

I’m just going home

Reviews

[Érenn]

Well you have clearly expressed your hate(?) for poetry. But you have done it with humor which I guess is the major plus point of this poem. I have been meaning to come to your page for a while, but since I am busy reading so many works, kinda hard not to get here quickly. Now I had trouble reading the it the first time around because of the way you have broken verses. Now the only thing I ensure my poetry follows is a flow. That's all i care. Whether free verse or rhymes or acrostics( I do varied styles ) So for me here there is only a break in the flow at the line: Don't even exist. kinda hard to catch the flow. Other than that you have maintained structure, there's actually some real good humor and sarcasm. This one was never really about invoking imagery but it makes one think, so it does a job as a poem.

Still points to improve on: When you are writing a short piece of poetry, try to create a little more impact, free verse or not. Hate it or love it. When you are expressing something ensure that the flow is never disrupted. It helps. You are stating stuff, how about use examples to show this very rhyme crime. Take the poem you hate most and express the love you have for it (Sarcasm rocks!!) Now that's my suggestion. ^^

Now although my profile might say I am a poet because of so many poems posted, but I'd say I am an accidental poet. I just started out poetry( just last month in fact) to fine tune my skills and command over the English Language since it is not my native tongue. And it turns out it has helped me a lot more than I could ever imagine. I am a fan of writing prose since I do not get time to write them nowadays (Actually writing a novel series, not posted any of it here though) . But this has ended up being quite useful. Although I was not a fan of poetry it's helped me a lot now in writing. I know this because I see you have written books. And I like to read and write stories more than anything else. I will be giving your book a read as well ^^ May take time but I will share my views there as well.( I think i will do a better job there than here) Thought of sharing this as well.

I enjoyed the read thank you for sharing ^^

[Zoë]

I really dislike poetry, but writing a small book on poetry is a school assignment almost every year. I think that helped lead to my dislike because poetry was something I've always been forced to do it, even though I'm not very good at it. I actually only put this on here because I wanted to enter it in a contest, I never expected to get any review, so thanks.
I understand being busy reading other things! I've also been meaning to stop by your page too but school and prior promises of reviewing keep getting in my way XD

This is actually an older poem (I think it's from my freshmen year) and I definitely see how choppy it is. It's a lot worse than my current poetry, which is why I didn't think about the broken sentences before I posted it. And yeah, the flow is all over the place, but after you've read it once I think it's easier to catch. I'm glad I did my job as a poet and made you think, because this was never about invoking imagery.

I agree that short poems should have more impact. They take up less space so they should really say something or get you to feel an emotion that six lines of text normally wouldn't be able to cause. I do need to work on my flow though, so thanks for pointing that out. And yeah, sarcasm does rock.

I never thought about poetry helping with normal prose writing, but now that I think about it it makes sense. It would definitely help writing flow better, so I may write look into writing more poetry. I've had a few ideas for stories that I could tell through a poem (one of which has to do with my book New Dawn) namely love stories though, which I'm not good at writing or expressing.

Ooh, I do love novels. If you ever posted it on here I would read it in a heart beat, and I may look through your writing later and read over any stories you have posted (As stated above, I'm bad at poetry, so I would feel bad reviewing that and not being able to give much feed back).

I do have two books posted on here, but I would love it if you read over New Dawn instead of The Mage Chronicles. New Dawn is my predominant story (which mostly means I'm working on it more because I like it more) so I would love feedback on that one than the other, if you manage to get to it that is :) Don't worry if it takes a while, I understand. In the mean time I'll hopefully get over to your page and check some things out.

I'm glad you enjoyed reading and thanks for reviewing!

[Érenn]

Umm well yeah might take a while before I even post those. I like to edit and reedit so much, lost count of it am pretty paranoid about it as well. So might throw in a short story related to the Universe sometime in the future for you to read. And well I guess we really like novels. I actually consider myself a psycho reader since I read a lot of things. Not just novels or light novels or manga or i end up reading religious scriptures, thesis, case studies......, well i think you get the point. The other thing is I read fast so I finish a 400 page novel in a matter of 5-6 hours. And I usually am immersed in my reads. Oh well if you want an example about how to impart a story in poem form, I actually did that recently, It's a 3 act series titled A Game of Cards. You can definitely give that a read and I can assure you it will not feel boring and you needn't have to crack your head trying to interpret stuff there hope it helps ^^ Well i will be looking at New Dawn soon. I still have JCat's story to review...... Damn my works pretty cut out for me XD

[Zoë]

I understand, I have stories written that I don't have any intentions of posting anytime soon. Just know that if you do put them up I will read them. You remind me of my friend, she reads super fast (not as fast as you, but still super fast) and she edits so much that it's taken her almost half a year to finish two chapters.
By the universe you you mean the universe and all the starts in it or the universe in which your story takes place? Either way I'll read it.
I love reading everything as well, although I'm a slower reader so it takes me longer. But if I really get into it I can knock out a 400 page book or two in a day. In terms of manga, have you ever read One Punch Man? It's pretty short compared to a lot of other mangas, but it's absolutely hilarious and one of my favourites. Also, have you ever read the book Eon by Alison Goodman? It's one of my favourite series (there's only two and they're both pretty long) and I get the feeling you'd like it and finish them in a day.
I'll look into your 3 act piece, it sounds really interesting and that's just going off the title. Also, not having to interpret things is the best, and I thank you.
Thanks for looking at my work! I'll look at yours when I have the time too (gotta love being a reviewer).
I do love JCat's stuff though. Her (his?) work is really well written and it's always a good read. Granted it may make you a bit depressed... but that's depending on what you read.

[Érenn]

Haha will read all of those works you have mentioned here actually. Jcat's writing is something I enjoyed, so that's why I read. I am sure you must have stumbled across my review there. I just created A Dragon Story for a contest. My eyes fell on this one just half an hour back, and woosh I already created this piece for the contest. I have posted the script right now ^^, you can give it a read if you want to.

[Zoë]

Ill try to read and review it if I have time tomorrow. But I'll be at school for most of the day and then I'll have homework and extra curriculars, so i may not get to it until Tuesday ^^ Also, if you like, One Punch Man was resently adapted into an anime, so you may like that as well. But theres more to read than there is to watch.

[Érenn]

Oh sorry forgot to mention that I already read One Punch Man, the original drawn manga by ONE so yes pretty aware of the developments there ^^. And yes I LOVE anime after reading, so you can bet I have already watched tons of those ^^

[McKayla]

This is very good Zoe. Please write more.

[747]

Ha ha ha, I like that ending. There's probably not much that I can say after that first review, but I will say you're doing a pretty bang-up job. As long as poetry is real to you, it's not wrong.

Every piece has to have purpose, struggle, plight, revelation, yada yada, whatever; otherwise it's dry and boring. Those characteristics of a piece come in all shapes, sizes, colours, methods, etcetera etcetera.
You have them. So good job. Always room for improvement, but even "near perfection" still is not perfect.

Good work. Good piece.

[Zoë]

Thank you for the compliments :)