Soon to Bloom

It's similar to the poem 'A Delicate Rosebud'. Let me know which you prefer.

A hidden acre
Buries a dilapidated cottage,
Overgrown with a garden.

A garden of death,
Grief,
And regrets.

Walk into this garden
Surrounding the cottage,
And try to find life
Where you'd least expect it.

You may find the start of a
Beautiful rosebud,
Trying to fight her way towards the sun.

Striving hard to reach the top,
And trying to make her better best,
But no matter how hard she tries,
Twisted weeks always suffocate her.

Yet the bud remains optimistic,
Knowing that one day
She will outgrow those bitter blades.

Author's Note

Please read the description.

Also, nitpick away!

Reviews

[East of Eden]

You may find the start of a
Beautiful rosebud,
Trying to fight her way towards the sun.

it's a gorgeous poem lovely imagery and a little bit mysterious
thanks

[Clarisse Nanoit]

I like the phrases "delapidated cottage" and "bitter blades" more than what you have in the other poem, but overall, I think the other one is better because it goes more into detail about the little rosebud's dreams. lol. It makes me think of me! :)
KH

[Travis Lawrence]

Lol, really I am in no mood for much explanation, I don't think I could give one very well, but regardless, just for fun, I took your poem and twisted some things around, added words, deleted lines and phrases I thought hurt the poem with a kind of staleness. Anyway, see if any of this catches your eye, and feel free to use it or play off it. Let it inspire change, but only if you want it to ;-)

A hidden acre
Buries a cottage's dilapidated wood,
Overgrown with a greiving garden.

Walk in

You may find the start of a
Rosebud beautifully
Trying to sway her way to the sun.

Striving growth to reach the lit top,
And better trying to make her best,
But no matter,
Twisted weeks suffocate her advances.

Though this red rose buds
And knows
She will outgrow those bitter
Blades.



Have a nice day!

-Travis

[shadadakiya]

that is very pretty the weeds always try to destroy the rose's