Two Strangers and Their Words

just something i thought of after talking to a fellow poet online.

For many, many months,
The only glimpse of one another
Came from the secret words
Written by the hearts of two strangers.

Her soul carefully penned poems
Melodic in every line,
The boy so carefully read,
Absorbing every word so fine.

With her vivid words,
He drew the details of her face,
Marking carefully the beauty
That has left a trace.

A trace smeared across his heart,
A stain of passion
Enveloped by two strangers,
An embrace of diction.


 

Author's Note

well, this is rather icky. defintely not my best. but what can i say, i've kinda entered a poetic block.

rip it apart please. but with reason. i needa know what to fix.

Reviews

[Clarisse Nanoit]

I like it. I don't think it needs that much work, really. Maybe, like the last reviewer suggested, you might add a little something explaining what "might happen" in the future between these strangers. I like the intriguing nature of it... SO COMPELLING.
KH
P.S. Tell me the real story? :P

[shadadakiya]

not to bad but what do exspect for to stranger's,dig inside your heart for more.