January 1, 1936: By Candlelight

 

Dear Diary,

 

Allow me to introduce myself as Mary Debenham, the soon to be fiancée of Colonel Arbuthnot. If I wasn't so exhausted from last night's gathering, I would be twirling around my bedroom like a schoolgirl. Alli, Bob Arthbuthnot's cousin, brought over a package. Giddy with excitement, she shoved it in my arms, and demanded I open the gift.

Only days after Christmas, and my love was sending me another present? I was quite baffled, but excited at the same time. What new gift has he bought me now?

It turned out to be this beautiful handwoven diary. On top laid a golden locket used to open the new diary. With a smitten smile, I pulled the dairy into a tight embrace. Just what I needed. My last journal was torn to pieces by the Karadah family's little devil of a dog, Banu. She was so irritated by the way the little ones were treating her that she took all the anger built up inside her plump body, and took it out on my poor journal. I told Bob of this misfortune right before he left, and he said it was no big deal. He said it was a mere book! Offended, I left his arms and headed towards my room. The journey of my past year was carefully written in that book. In minutes, the little details I won't remember in ten years were destroyed. I suppose leaving me hurt really got to him.

Anyway, later on at the party I chatted with Alli and a few other governess companions of mine. Alli mentioned that Bob has been browsing jewelry stores, trying to find just the right ring. Of course, I wasn't supposed to know. I'm still not to know. But I can't wait. We've always had the intentions of starting a family together, and settling in North America, where we'd originally been.

- Mary Debenham

 

Author's Note

This is for a school project that is due this Thursday. If anyone can help edit/revise this, I will appreciate you for years to come. There will be at least 9 more entries! And let me know anything you honestly wanna say.
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EDIT: I'm just correcting the grammar and stuff now.

Reviews

[Clarisse Nanoit]

---->You forgot the indent the third paragraph.
Of course, I wasn't supposed to know. I'm still now in fact.----> I'm still (not?) in fact.

Well, I don't know what was so confusing about that little typo. lol. They got all bent out of shape. :P GREAT and very well written. LOVED IT! Can't wait to keep reading.
KH

[Doug]

yes, i agree with brenda. that part didn't make sense to me at all. everything else, however, was very well written. if you want to to be a larger chapter, i would try and flesh out some more visual imagery. pretty good though.

-doug-

[Brenda Sue]

Very well written. Only in the last paragraph the line "I'm still now in fact" doesn't make sense to me. Other than that it is a very well written story and very interesting.