Dying From the Inside Out

nightmare

first it’s the spiders
then it’s the ticks
if somehow i fall asleep,
all i see is death
i can’t eat
it hurts
and i choke trying to swallow
i feel like i’ll puke
with every bite i take
my body is being
rejected by my brain
and i can’t live
much longer
like this

Author's Note

Arachnid: four pairs of segmented legs and a body composed of a cepholothorax and an abdomen.
Unfortunately, spiers, ticks, mites, and scorpions fit this description.

Reviews

[Brette Medb]

Interesting how you wrote your poem with more imagery than a story line...not like most poets around here. Many people feel the need to make a story or a plot line and sprinkle some adjectives here and there but I liked this better. Using the words to show what you wanted not tell. To be honest I think this could be a little longer but it's fine just as it is. Spiders freak me out so I thought this was a little creepy. Nice work.

Brette

[darkgurl]

This is very well expressed I like this great emotional piece here well written.

[Loosey]

awesome.

100 points.


I liked the part where there was choking and dying best.