Do You See Me?

I see you

Standing behind the counter,

You're hair in your face.

Do you see me

Staring across the room,

My face hidden behind a hard cover book?

You seem busy

I am afraid to disturb you, to call out your name

but I know I have nothing to fear.

You would not hear me...

It seems you never do anymore.

I see you

Hiding your face from the world outside,

Consumed with your work.

Do you see me

Moving farther away than I ever want

To be from you?

Do you see the way

My face lightens as you walk into the room?

Do you see how my eyes

Start to sparkle when they see you?

Do you hear the way

My heart jumps when I hear your voice?

Don't you see?

Do you even care?

...

Do you see me at all?

Author's Note

I'm sure this is becoming a habit..
Comment, critique. Not my best piece I'm sure, but it is twenty to eleven so...

Reviews

[serpent]

i would say this piece makes a nice read...nothing very flashy or deep about it...however a smooth flow holds the interest of the reader...the simplicity of the piece and describing a complex state of mind are to me the mainstay of this write.

good job!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I liked this piece too. I really thought you did a great job. I loved the message within this piece as well. It has great flow. Thanks for sharing.

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

I really liked this piece it had a very strong emotion that i can relate to. Great work of art.

[Silvario]

very nicely penned.
sweet and simple makes for some of the best work.
youe emotion transfers well from you to "paper" to the reader.

well done, keep it up :)

[Tony]

You show how a simple "counter" and "hair in the face" can really show a great divide between two people-- a faraway admirer who's really not that faraway at all. Really felt the weight of longing here-- Great work!

[Nobody.]

Powerful writing. Really feels like heavy emotion. Well done. I felt it. Cheers!