Once Upon A Winters Night

I wrote this December 10th as a way to express my feelings without waking the whole town the night before. I'm attempting to turn it into a song.

Once upon a winters night

There was only you and me

The world around is faded

You were all that I could see

Once upon a winters night

All my dreams came true

Because once upon that winters night

I fell in love with you.

Author's Note

Sorry it took so long to get up. I attemtped it at Christmas, but my laptop was acting up.

Reviews

[Void Unspoken]

This is very nice! I love your writings! You're very good considering all things! And you're only 14... WOW! No... I think you have an extreme sense of tallent and ability inside you though. Your poems are free and expressive and I'm getting and idea from reading your stuff that you have a strong passion for writing and creativity. Am I right? Well anyway... great flow and rhythem. I enjoyed reading this one as well!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I loved this! I could hear a melody in my head as I read this. The flow was amazing. I also loved the rhythm. This was a very nice piece all around. I think this would be an amazing song for children. That's what I believe. Thanks for sharing.

[Silvario]

sweet and simple and so very cute. it made me smile :))
nicely done :)

[Crow]

Very nice expression of the emotion for love.

[sammyj]

great job, love it

[Kia-chan!]

Wow. This is really good! I love the rhythem to it, and your ryming was absolutely perfect. I really love this. Very good.

[Kitten]

Short, sweet and very nice. I enjoyed it. It was a nice break from my deep angsty poems I've been reading. [laughs]