Mama

A buried cause.

 

 

 

Your insides spilling of lies

 

Luring me into your ever ending web

 

Will your lips ever taste honesty

 

Is your spirit already dead

 

Wondering the cold afterlife

 

While the rest of you sits in your heart of stone

 

You erased my hope as if it was easy

 

Pulling me by my fingertips

 

Declaring the heart of mine that you will always own

 

These chains that you burdened on me

 

Without a thought or word

 

I pleaded for your resurrection

 

I dug at your grave

 

But you simply replied

 

"Sweetie, your only in my way"

 

I could for see this happening

 

But I grieved this day

 

When it suddenly appeared before my innocent eyes

 

The cards they told me, mama was ill

 

Only tears claimed her now

 

Old cigarettes, and booze

 

Memories long before my birth

 

If only I could set fire to them

 

Watch them beseech to carry on

 

So I could undo all my mothers wrong

 

Though her temper wouldn't bare to watch them burn

 

Because there's nothing, at all, mother would earn

 

But the right to happiness

 

She would decline

 

Even my scarred wrists

 

Deep of fury, running through my veins

 

I yearn to see her jubilee

 

But forever, always

 

She would decline.

Author's Note

Hope you enjoy!

Reviews

[emilytaylorinkie]

You have pretty good descriptions and tell an interesting story. However, I find you need to strengthen your flow/rhythm. I also found you could shorten it tad. Short and simple equals powerful.

I am, no poet, though. So take what you wish.
Good work.

[Rachael]

Thanks so much for the critique! :)

[Graggz]

trully amazing hey ,i also loved ur unique pattern of writing 2

[MoriartyMesa]

Let me throw something that went right to the gray cells and told me this was the work that owes a tribute from a great philosopher https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=COL_est2Vf0

And I think it shall remark my own thought's





Nice work and it made me reflect...................

[Akashi]

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[Rachael]

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