Poem For A Fleeing Love

A mixture of shorts

Poem For A Fleeing Love

Two hearts beating as one

 two souls sharing one love 

one love to last for an eternity 

Stare into the future

 the past remains the past 

dealing with a love 

you always thought would last

Dealing with the arguments 

sitting all alone 

Just thought I would say I love you

 then hanging up the phone

Relationships blossom

Then slowly turn to black

Love is an obstacle 

The energy I surely lack

Live for the here and now

New relationships embrace

Your feelings are allowed to change

Your face will remain your face 

Little quotes of love 

Little songs of woe

Little pieces of emotion

Ashley don’t let them show

Black is who I am

Black is my true aim

Want to earn my love?

Well that is a shame

Author's Note

Please give honest reviews as always

Reviews

[Shelby]

Little quotes of love
Little songs of woe
Little pieces of emotion
Ashley don’t let them show

These were my favorite lines. It's so true that we try to put on a facade when we are in pain or torment. I was also struck by the last stanza. It was dark and sad, an unfortunate consequence of the pain the speaker has been through (you, I'm assuming?). However, that last line seemed the beginnings of anger and, eventually, recovery, and I liked that you ended, if not upbeat, then at least not on a heartbreak. I must also commend you for your apt titles. I always have to use one of my more important lines for my titles, which generally means it's just a throwaway for me. You, however, always capture the theme of your poem with a very satisfactory title that never is just a line from the piece. I applaud you talent for finishing a poem so brilliantly. Thank you for sharing this with me.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

wow wow wow is all I can seem to say

Little quotes of love
Little songs of woe
Little pieces of emotion
Ashley don’t let them show

Amazing lines I love them so mush made me wish I had wrote them

[Dilan Gray]

I really like this poem. It is a different writing style from your usual longer lines but I really like it. You pulled it off beautifully which shows how great you are. This was a fantastic poem.

[fernii]

Good poem :)

[Apathy To Empathy]

T.T It is a nice poem, but the last verse stood out to me the most, showing me how cold love can be in a way. Still, it was a very nice write!!

[Shiningwolf]

This expresses me as well :) Comes from the heart.

[Stef Outsiders]

Love is tough feeling to concur, once you've felt it and you've been hurt . its hard to fall again, so you cocoon yourself in what you do best. And that is being black...
I love it!!!! love the last verse... it shows your personality!