Smurf

Written for an Ex

Smurf

Self expression  

Made from heaven

Unique style

Running wild

Finding love

In your face

Loud and loyal

Oasis our place

Vertically challenged 

Expressive and strong

You hold my heart

Our time will be long

Un comparable in every way

Can’t wait until I see you today

Author's Note

This poem was written for my ex girlfriend totally forgot about it

*notice the starting letter"

I know this is not my usual style but a poem is a poem so please review

Reviews

[Shelby]

Sweet. And very different. That's what I like about you. You don't write as a typical poet on this sight. I love how well you made this work, what with the constrictions of each opening letter, and the rhyme scheme you adhered to. I always respect people who are able to succeed at doing the things I fail at, such as writing in anything but free form. But this seems to come to you easily. The restrictions don't feel like restrictions when you write. You use it to your advantage and never stray into the used or hackneyed. Also, the switch from aabb rhyme scheme to abcb came at the most opportune moment and brought a depth and shift that made this piece even more interesting. Very well done and I thank you for sharing this with me.

[fernii]

I like the rhyming and I think it is a good poem :) keep writing

[Liza]

i like when writers play with different styles; shows diversity and an open mind
when i saw that this was written for an ex - i immediately assumed it would be in a negative light; this was refreshing; you showed appreciation and show a light through your eyes
i am not sure what vertically challenged means - or if it is an insult - but it was very subtle and kind of a classy insult lol

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

haha!hope u showed her this, def wud put a smile on her face! :)
great work!