Smurf

Written for an Ex

Smurf

Self expression  

Made from heaven

Unique style

Running wild

Finding love

In your face

Loud and loyal

Oasis our place

Vertically challenged 

Expressive and strong

You hold my heart

Our time will be long

Un comparable in every way

Can’t wait until I see you today

Author's Note

This poem was written for my ex girlfriend totally forgot about it

*notice the starting letter"

I know this is not my usual style but a poem is a poem so please review

Reviews

[Shelby]

Sweet. And very different. That's what I like about you. You don't write as a typical poet on this sight. I love how well you made this work, what with the constrictions of each opening letter, and the rhyme scheme you adhered to. I always respect people who are able to succeed at doing the things I fail at, such as writing in anything but free form. But this seems to come to you easily. The restrictions don't feel like restrictions when you write. You use it to your advantage and never stray into the used or hackneyed. Also, the switch from aabb rhyme scheme to abcb came at the most opportune moment and brought a depth and shift that made this piece even more interesting. Very well done and I thank you for sharing this with me.

[Hello, Goodbye]

curious different style, but work to effectiveness for sure..

[J. R.]

Clever use of lettering there.

[.shalynn.009.]

I love acrostic poems when they are doen well, and you actually managed to make it rhyme. I've written a few of these. None of them were as sweet as this, nor did they have as good a rhythm. "Oasis our place" This was the only line where it didn't seem to follow the rhythm as well as the other lines.

"Un comparable" Since it's technically one word (although kind of a made up word) you should put a dash between "un" and "comparable" and connect them.

I like this a lot, though. Was the Smurf thing a jok ebetween you two? My favorite line was "Vertically challenged" I've heard this line a lot, but never in a poem. And the last line really brought it all together and made it feel like it came to a conclusion. I really like this. Sorry if it took me a long time to read, though. I promise I wasn't ignoring you.

[Arabdha]

you have experimented with a different style..and have done it really well..each phrase taken individually here seems incoherent and rather mundane..but as an ensemble its pretty great..oh and i'm trying hard to keep pace with the RRs..so forgive me if i haven't reviewed any of the other works..keep writing..

[Ashley Myers]

aww its so cute!!! lol made me smile

[Thea Fuentebella]

cute and different!

[Katie]

Cute. I like this one, It's different indeed. It make me smile. Nice work with the acrostic style.
Still lacks punctuation. I;m going to start sounding like a broken reccord about that soon, if I don't already.

[jugeholden]

Cool poem. I wonder how it would sound put to music?

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

This is a fun poem. Probably made her smile.