Poor Little Rag Doll

This is interesting prose work for poetry. I think this would make a remarkable series. The doll, entering into the living, to tell the horrid tale, of all that she had seen. Quite impressive.. Very origional and very very intriquiging, You should make this poem a preface, and re-order it as a book. Each chapter can be in poetic form telling this sad tale from begining to end.. Wonderful creation. 100/100 for the idea alon, and a 100/100 for the technical its really a 200/100 in my oppinion, but they won't let me go higher than 100. Let me know if you pursue this as a book of prose poetry so I can add it to my reading list. Thank you

Posted 13 Years Ago

I'd like to see a continuation as well. It's very well written with a sense of raw emotion.

Posted 13 Years Ago

I think it would be interesting to continue this as a series. Although I don't think you should just give up the secret, you should make the reader feel like they had to work for it. It adds interest and makes the reader more invested.

As for technicals
Lacks punctuation again, which I dislike. I'm a fan of proper punctuation. It is required in any form of writing and poetry is no exception.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Definitely make this a series - am deeply intrigued - the only thing bugging me was shouldn't it be 'a smile appears on this rag dolls face rather than 'from'. Apart from that i loved it though. Very clever twist at the end taking it from sad and somewhat nostalgic in tone to sinister and fascinating.

Posted 13 Years Ago

i like it when toys are used in dark stories..it's interesting and creepy and BEAUTIFUL, gothic and unpredictable. an interesting story indeed :)
can't wait for the next series of this one!

Posted 13 Years Ago

beautifully written with utter sensitivity.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Wow!! I would say you have a great thing going here. I see lots more coming from this.. Loved the way it was brought forth, the wording, the style.. Oh yea! Def a winner in my eyes, Go for it!

Mags xx

Posted 13 Years Ago

Yeah I really like that, a living dead doll! A series of poems would be awesome... Thumbs up as always!! 100/100

Posted 13 Years Ago

creepy and I loved it made me wanna know what the secret is please tell

Posted 13 Years Ago

A secret, I love them...I wonder what darkness may lay:).
I love the texture and the flow of this poem..has a mysterious
beat that makes one wonder from line to line.

Posted 13 Years Ago

this poem is about a rag doll..but the philosophy applies to life as well..very intense and leaves one wondering about the possibilities..a 100/100 :)

Posted 13 Years Ago