The Alleyway

once again pushing the barriers writing what people avoid

The Ally

Demonic pathways demanding lust

lonely walker breaking trust

buying drinks all to subdue

Rohypnol added or a few

I saw her teasing, dancing all night

gazing at me, frivolous spite

now the upper hand is mine 

spiked drink take your swigs of wine

Following you home the darkest of night

no people to accompany you to my delight

run up behind a found hammer in hand

blow to your head over your body I stand

undress you while your dazed and confused

your frail little body ready to be abused

“tease me will you , seduce me all night

c**k teasing w***e you will remember tonight”

slowly coming round she screams in my face

constrict her breathing her arms all over the place

deeper and deeper I feel myself drawing near

The look in her eyes of pain and fear

reach my climax above her I now stand

“please” she begs reaching out her hand

I pull out a knife once hidden from view

press its cold metal to her throat

“you won’t say a word if you know what’s good for you”

leaving her crying in pain and alone

This dark alleyway she sits an unemotional drone 

Author's Note

Another poem that rarely uses the subject matter I have embraced
Again I know its a hard poem to read but if you get through it I appreciate your feedback

thank you for reading And sorry in advance if anyone has suffered from this abuse

Reviews

[Shelby]

Dark and appropriately ugly. This is such a sensitive subject, but you capture the need of the rapist to overpower their quarry vey well. I don't know if this is a compliment in the traditional sense, but you enter the mind of your subject and create a believable circumstance and I was impressed at how you portrayed these two people in such a realistic, honest light. As a storyteller, you are a master, and I'm glad to see you don't really feel this way, because I liked that you told it from the viewpoint of the monster, and did it well. It was dark and an uncomfortable subject matter for most people, but you did it with just the right amount of restraint, never straying toofar over the line and keeping a respectful distance from describing the gritty details unnecessarily. Some people drown their dark poem in overwhelming details that can make things uncomfortably real, but youdrew a line between art and perversity. Well done and thank you for sharing.

[Karina Longo]

Wow. I love how you explore this polemic subject - so dark, so intense, so naughty. I agree with trainwreck though. It should be Mature. Such a strong, tough subject.
But me, I like your writing.

[trainwreck]

You might want to add a mature rating to this. It was very hard, but I enjoyed it all the same.

[JoJo Q. Finsburry]

Wow ... to be honest, i can't say i liked it, but it was executed well and very vivid, which i'm sure you were going for. Dark, dirty, and shocking, and like i said, well done, and good flow. There was an evil thread in there, not just angry, but malicious, and brooding, that i have to say was (despite myself) almost delicious.

[Anna]

Well, I think that it is definitely a touchy subject, but i have to say well done. The imagery and rhythm were pretty unnerving, heartless and brutal. I think you could probably give me nightmares if you wrote prose.

[howlfjdks]

It's a no-brainer Mr. Black you take poetry where I thought it doesn't go. I am amazed by the concept being set in not many words. To take on the darkness, as a writer, exploring that mind set...now that takes courage.

[Magdelena]

Now this was splendid! it took us into the mind of the darkest of places.. Places some think they know, yet few feel. Your words, well they made me feel.. Each and every line, i felt her terror, your evil thoughts.. To this. I say Bravo!


Hugs
Mags xx

[northern monkey]

It takes REAL talent to grip your audience with such a subject. This uncomfortable read reminds me of some of Dennis Potter's writing. Extraordinary.

[Jonathan]

F*****g a this is what I call true imagination of the
mind then putting it into a rhythmic flow. Well done
Don't be afraid to venture out of the norm. This is what
True poets do. Now you got me hooked!! As a fan you better
Not let me down.

[Becky Lawrence]

A lot of your poems are so dark... But if you wrote about light and happy things, it just wouldn't be the same.

[guiltyascharged]

Wow. This was mad deep and mad good. I like it. You're goood at this. I especially like the flow.